User:Cryoung4/Thomas Dent (writer)/Bjohn2548 Peer Review

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Cryyoung4
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Content- The content in early life and collegiate life is very well summarized and placed. I think this will be a great pattern to continue on. Although you have made great progress and the page is looking better and better the more you edit, you could cut out a bit of the collegiate life and input more of his accomplishments during his middle life and later life. Or even "other well-known works" or something of that context.

- Consider adding a picture!

- When listing the editorials don't feel pressured to list every single one. Possibly list a few and then create another section labeled "other works, or early life works".

Tone- You are doing great at neutrality, but there were a few things that I flagged as I was reading.

- "He made this decision to attend Morehouse as a way to venture out on his own and become a better writer."

If there is evidence of him attending Morehouse to become a better writer be sure to cite it so it does not come off as being opinionated

- "His choice to attend Morehouse was a direct consequence of his efforts at cultivating his strengths to benefit his future work in the Civil Rights Movement."

Be sure to cite specific evidence that leads to this conclusion

Sources and References- I see a good list of sources and if you need anymore do not be afraid to find more.

You are doing an  AMAZING  job! Can't wait to see how it turn out!