User:Csparks01/Civil Rights Act of 1968/AEK7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? -- Csparks01
 * Link to draft you're reviewing -- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Csparks01/Civil_Rights_Act_of_1968?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) -- Civil Rights Act of 1968

Evaluation
Overall, I felt that the existing article of this bill was sufficiently thorough and informative. I also think you did a great job with the draft so far, and you added in some effective ideas to edit the article! I think that the area with the most room for improvement is the introduction of the article. In the first sentence, it's stated that the CRA of 1968 is a landmark law "...in the United States signed into law by United States President Lyndon B. Johnson...", and I noticed that it felt redundant to include "United States" twice in such close proximity. I think it could be described more concisely as a United States law passed by President Lyndon B. Johnson. In addition, I think that the first sentence would be stronger if it were to briefly touch on what the purpose of the law was or why it's important, or this could be implemented in a following sentence instead.

The organization of the introduction could possibly be structured more effectively. All of the sections are labeled with a small heading except for the very first one, and I think it would be helpful to include one there that just says "Introduction" or something along those lines. The "Legislative History" section is really brief in comparison to the others and feels a bit redundant because most of its info is already in the first section. I think I would combine the introductory section with the legislative history section to improve the organization. It might be helpful to just add a new, brief introductory section and then combine the currently unlabeled one with the "Background" section instead, since it is sort of a long and detailed lead as is.

The content of the article is neutral, up-to-date, and informative. Objective diction is used throughout, and I didn't identify any signs of bias nor any intent to persuade readers. All relevant aspects about the topic seem to be covered along with appropriate use of various sources and authors. The sources are credible, and no source is used excessively in comparison to another. Claims are properly credited/cited. All of the links I clicked worked. In the draft you've made, I think you could add some information regarding the legislative history that explains the differing opinions of the public/Congress before the act was passed or even any distinctive views that are relevant about any of its provisions today. There is one section called "Violations of the Fair Housing Act" which I thought was really interesting, and I think it would be helpful to add in there what kinds of legal punishments may occur if someone violates this law. I was kind of confused about why this was the only part that had a 'violations' section though, and maybe some similar info could be added about the others. The "Amendments" section could include more detail as well, such as how Congress members voted on these amendments and why. I agree with your comment at the top of the draft saying more information could be added about the Indian Civil Rights Act and Anti-Riot Act to balance out the longer Fair Housing Act section, and also that the article is mainly balanced and reliable all throughout.