User:Csparks01/Civil Rights Act of 1968/Emily J. L. Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Csparks01


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Csparks01/Civil_Rights_Act_of_1968?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Civil Rights Act of 1968

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is fairly clear, but it is a little long. I would recommend cutting it down a bit, especially the third paragraph (that starts with "Titles VIII through IX are commonly known as the Fair Housing Act..."), and adding that information back in elsewhere.

The content added to the Background and Legislative History sections is definitely relevant, well done! The only thing that I'm a little concerned about is the first sentence in the Legislative History section. Is there a reliable source stating that? I'm not saying the statement is wrong necessarily, I'm just worried that this might count as making connections on your own, which isn't supposed to be added to Wikipedia. You could also possibly add a little more detail to the Legislative History section overall.

Unfortunately the link for the first source is not working for me. It prompted me to sign in through OU, and then did not bring up the article. Can I suggest that you go back to that article and try to find the DOI to use instead? It should work then, and that way someone who doesn't go to OU can look at it as well. I can't really judge this one since I couldn't see it, but both of the other sources are definitely reliable. The content added to the Background section (second paragraph, about the Civil Rights Movement) needs sources as well. I also agree with the note you left that it needs more sources/information about Titles II-VII.

Overall, it's a great start!

Emily