User:Cstanton19/Women photographers/Pelton98 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cstanton19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cstanton19/Women photographers


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women photographers

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead Section:

-I wonder if the current lead section of the Wikipedia page should be altered to include some information on how female photographers have progressed to exist in the contemporary art world, as that seems to be something you will be focusing on bringing into the article? Maybe you could briefly frame contemporary female photographers in a simple guiding paragraph towards the end of the lead as there currently isn't one.

-There is currently no description to the various important movements of female photography for women in particular within the lead. I feel like you could provide some links in the lead stating those movements briefly? Since there isn't any explanation currently but it is included throughout the article I think that it may be important to include.

-The lead also seems to go off into a lot of detail regarding pictorialism and linking it to the men involved, and I wonder if maybe this is too much information to include within the lead section as it is very specific, and could be included in a history paragraph instead, but I could be wrong. I also noticed there are no citations beside the information included in the lead paragraph.

What you are planning on adding:

-I think that updating this list to include more contemporary female photographers is very important, I don't really know of too many but I think the list you have so far is good, and would also be productive for linking to more wiki pages on those artists, as well as some images of their photography within that section.

-I would also look into other prominent contemporary female photographers to add onto that section and list that you are currently creating.

-I think adding information on Claude Cahun that you're planning to do will be very important to the article, and also including some images of her photography. I also think that Claude Cahun should be noted within the surrealist section of the article as she was a highly prominent figure within surreal photography.

Possible Additional Info that could be added or improved on the current page?

-I've noticed the way the article is currently laid out has different images of the photography relating to the different sections and movements disclosed. I also noticed that in the section entitled 'African-American women in Photography,' there are not currently any images or examples of the work they have made. I think it would be really important to insert some images of what they have done.

-The page itself does seem a little bit all over the place, but I also understand that it is a pretty broad topic to be covering and that it would be challenging to organize it in a concise way that includes all the important figures and movements involved. Although I do feel like the different paragraphs jump around to some extent in the way that they are laid out? I could be wrong but it may be something to try altering, as for me I find the page a bit hard to read since it is kind of ubiquitous.