User:Csteel3777/Child health and nutrition in Africa/Alisha2003 Peer Review

General info
Csteel3777
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Child Health and Nutrition in Africa draft
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Child Health and Nutrition in Africa
 * Child Health and Nutrition in Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Coco first added to the introductory/history section of the article. The information added about the effects of colonization on nutrition disparities within developing countries and between developed and developing countries is a crucial point to explore. For example, when Coco mentioned how colonialism controlled the production and export of crops in those regions and connected it to malnutrition disparities, I got a clearer understanding of how this problem is rooted in systemic indifferences. One thing that can be improved is making the added text sound more neutral. With a subject like colonialism it can be very hard to navigate a neutral tone, but one thing I suggest is just pulling more hard statistics from sources. Also I think this topic is something that can be expanded on if there is more information that can be pulled from the sources. This is a very important aspect of the history of malnutrition to discuss so maybe it can be made a separate paragraph in that same section of the article. Overall, for this addition I think it definitely improves the quality of the article as it adds a more nuanced approach to the issue.

Coco also added to the "Deficiency in essential nutrients and micronutrients" to talk about the three common forms of undernutrition in children. I think this information is important to explore specific concerns that children face with undernutrition. I think each form of undernutrition, stunting, wasting, and being underweight, can be expanded on more using the sources that were chosen. Use the sources to maybe bring in more statistics. I think also following the structure of the other paragraphs in this section could help with figuring out what more to add to elaborate on the information. Overall, this addition definitely improves the article and adds more necessary information to the section.

For the last main addition of the therapeutic foods, I would like to see more expansion if your source allows it. I think it is an intriguing idea to explore more and you already have a lot of good information to work with. I think that if this section had more information.