User:Cstran8/Mountain reindeer/GuwopC98 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cstran8


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cstran8/Mountain_reindeer?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mountain reindeer

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

At first glance, grammar errors need to be addressed. I don't know what part of the article you are addressing. I think you need to include the section in the article. After reading through, I am assuming that you are strengthening the "description section" of the original wiki. I think it would be better if you expound on this topic by going into more detail about the panting and how it affects their shifts in temperature. You could offer a range in how it affects the body temperature (it could be a minimal change or a drastic change). Your information is unbiased, so that is a good thing.

Your proposed edit will have a great effect on the article. It will strengthen the validity of it. I think should either put it in a section about "Physiology of the Mountain Reindeer" or just add more information about it. This "new section" would discuss how Mountain Reindeer are able to regulate their breathing in such a harsh environment.

In conclusion, your article is unbiased. The only thing I did was add some punctuation marks. I think if you create a section to discuss the physiology of a Mountain Reindeer (specifically, oxygen transport through the blood) it would have a profound effect on the article.