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Lulenna (talk) 02:19, 5 April 2020 (UTC) - Revision of redundant or repetitive sentences:

Lulenna (talk) 02:58, 9 April 2020 (UTC) Additional redundant/confusing sentences:
 * From the sub-section Perpetrator pseudonym: "Following the publication of the "Dear Boss" letter and the Saucy Jacky postcard, both forms of correspondence gained worldwide notoriety."
 * Possible edit: "Both the "Dear Boss" letter and the Saucy Jacky postcard gained worldwide notoriety after their publication."
 * Actually considering deletion of this sentence because it contains information that has no relationship to the subsection itself.
 * From the Lead section: "Although unlikely to have been written by the actual murderer, the "Dear Boss" letter was the first piece of correspondence received in which the author signed his name as Jack the Ripper, ultimately resulting in the unidentified killer being known by this name." [3] citation
 * Edit: "The "Dear Boss" letter was the first piece of correspondence with the author name signed as Jack the Ripper" [3] original citation
 * Addition of "Although unlikely. . ." leans towards the opinion of the letter being a hoax. Second clause risks being redundant
 * From the section Content: "Written in red ink, the two-page "Dear Boss" letter contains several spelling and punctuation errors, although the overall motivation of the author is evidently to both mock police investigative efforts and to threaten further murders."[4] citation
 * There are two parts to this sentence, the first being a description of the letter and it being written in red ink/possessing spelling and punctuation errors.
 * This can be revised to be in active voice and to shorten it. Perhaps something like "The "Dear Boss" letter is two pages long and was written in red ink." This will have to be double checked with the source to avoid plagiarism.
 * The second part begins with "although" with no previous argument to contrast. Therefore, it is unnecessary. It can simply be split up into a second sentence: "The overall motivation of the author was evidently to mock investigative efforts and to threaten further murders."
 * "to threaten further murders" sounds grammatically incorrect. It will have to be revised.

Lulenna (talk) 19:43, 17 April 2020 (UTC) Final edits to be moved onto Wikipedia


 * Deletion of the line "Following the publication of the "Dear Boss" letter and the Saucy Jacky postcard, both forms of correspondence gained worldwide notoriety."
 * In the Lead section: "Although many dispute its authenticity, the "Dear Boss" letter is regarded as the first piece of correspondence signed from Jack the Ripper." ([3] citation)
 * In the Content section: "The "Dear Boss" letter was written in red ink and is two pages long. The overall motivation of the author was evidently to mock investigative efforts and to allude to future murders."

Evidence for and against the letter being real/revision of bias:


 * Revision of bias within the article
 * In the introduction- "Although unlikely to have been written by the actual murderer"
 * Possibly change the wording of this statement in order to show that this is debated, the wording suggests it is almost certain the letter was not written by the killer
 * Include more sources and information on the authenticity of the letter

Ctb91 (talk) 02:03, 6 April 2020 (UTC)


 * From the sub section Authenticity: “The letter may have been kept as a souvenir by one of the investigating officers. In November 1987, the letter was returned anonymously to the Metropolitan Police, whereupon Scotland Yard recalled all documents relating to the Whitechapel Murders from the Public Record Office, now The National Archives, at Kew.[13]”
 * Edit: Deletion of “The letter may have been kept… officers.”
 * To reduce author’s own predictions that is not supported or proved.
 * From the subsection Media Publication: “In response, the Metropolitan Police published numerous handbills containing facsimiles of both this letter and the Saucy Jacky postcard[n 1] in the hope that a member of the public would recognise the handwriting of the author.”
 * Edit: Deletion of word "facsimile" and replace with "copies".
 * To simplify wording and increasing audience comprehensibility.
 * From the subsection Calligraphy and Linguistic Analysis:
 * Possible edit: addition of information from original article: “After analyzing the letters, Dr. Nini found that the usage of phrasal verbs such as ‘to keep back (to withhold)’ were included in both texts. His findings support the notion that the same individual was responsible for writing both the letter and postcard.”
 * To provide more detail about Dr. Nini’s findings and frame them in a less biased way.

SamanthaDuong (talk) 02:26, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Kpatel639 (talk) 03:51, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * From the subsection Calligraphy and Linguistic Analysis:
 * Revision of bias
 * Edit: 2nd paragraph; "...Andrea Nini stated his conviction that both the "Dear Boss" letter and the Saucy Jacky postcard had been written by the same individual"
 * I would either delete the mention of Saucy Jacky, or I would explain why it is there.
 * I would also include why/how Nini came to the conclusion that both the letter and postcard were written by the same individual. Even if it was a simple one sentence summary, I think it is important to include so that whoever is reading the "Dear Boss" article has at least some sort of idea of what they are reading.
 * There are no quotation marks in the article, so the sentence above sounds biased.
 * From the subsection Journalist's Confession
 * Extraneous information/Missing information
 * Edit: "In 1931, a journalist named Fred Best is reported to have confessed that he and a colleague at The Star newspaper named Tom Bullen had written the "Dear Boss" letter, the Saucy Jacky postcard, and other hoax messages purporting to be from the Whitechapel Murderer—whom they together had chosen to name Jack the Ripper—in order maintain acute public interest in the case and generally maintain high sales of their publication."
 * I would consider deleting this statement, because it seems relevant. It is already evident that the author to the "Dear Boss" letter has not been found, so a story about a journalist claiming that he was Jack the Ripper just to gain media attention seems off topic.
 * If this is still going to be included, I would find more sources and add them. Were there any more false confessions to writing the letters?  If so, who?  Is there a trend in demographics?  These are questions I would investigate and look further into

I found another website that provides some more information on the case. Because the Wikipedia article only mentioned Jack the Ripper as the suspect, I thought it would be necessary to read about other suspects. This website has a list of suspects and links to their backstories. My next step would be to look into the website to decide if it's a credible course. The link to the website is http://www.jackripper.co.uk/jack-the-ripper-dear-boss-letter.php. It also contains pictures that can be used to update the Wikipedia site.

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^ Sorry, but who wrote this? Also, the website looks more like a blog or forum that anyone can contribute to rather than a reliable source. The pages for suspects don't include any citation or where their information comes from. Lulenna (talk) 23:13, 14 April 2020 (UTC)