User:Culbert3002/Polar Bear Pass National Wildlife Area/Kai-tinker Peer Review

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 * Polar Bear Pass National Wildlife Area


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In this article, I found good organization, flow and very unbiased useful information. It was very interesting to read as well. I learned a lot about the management and the history of the Polar Bear Pass NWA.

Various information goals were met. There were sections on Geography, imperiled species, general species, land agreements, the people living in this area, management, climate and history of the polar bear pass NWA.

There are some things that need improvement. One, there are some spelling and grammar mistakes. I would run it through grammarly real quick and repost it over. It's super simple, free and takes way less time than proof reading your own paper. Also, there are some non-general knowledge facts in here that went uncited. Unless you knew this already, just cite your source so you don't get in trouble. Finally, from an orgainizational standpoint, I would put wildlife above endangered species. This will make it flow a little better but other than these it is a good article. I didn't have any unanswered questions at the end.

The tone of this article is very professional, I found no opinionated sentences, even when talking about the land agreements. Good job!

Your sources are high quality, just to reiterate, make sure that all of your facts that you put in here from outside sources do get cited.

As far as notability, the Geography section got a little repetitive, all good information but not everything needed to be in there. Other than that every section was clear and concise.

All sections of equity, diversity and inclusion were well done and had good sources. This is quite picky but maybe put a source from one of the indigenous nations in there if you can find one.

Finally, the whole article was written in a civil and helpful manner.

Overall, well done on the article, it was very informational and it will be cool to have this posted for real when we're done with this.