User:Cullen328/Sandbox/Democratic education


 * Since you asked, Elbbirg, here's my quick overview. I have no specific expertise in the field.


 * When you write that John Locke's work "justifies one of the main principles of democratic education", you need to cite a reliable secondary source that says that. When you say that Rousseau's novel "describes the supposedly ideal education of a young aristocrat, and includes many ideas that are still fundamental to the concept of democratic education" you need to cite a reliable secondary source that says that. When you say that Tolstoy was the "first major writer with practical experience of democratic education", you need to cite a reliable secondary source that says that. The quotes in the Tolstoy section (and any other quotes) MUST be referenced immediately after the close quotes. The section on Korczak should describe his impact on democratic education, based on what reliable secondary sources say. The section on Dartigan is unreferenced and doesn't say what the impact of the school has been more broadly. Reference 11 should be broken into several specific references to specific works, and references shouldn't say "among others". If the others are important, cite them. The section on the The Democratic School of Hadera is unreferenced.


 * As written, the section looks a lot like original research which is not appropriate for Wikipedia. Every claim which could conceivably be questioned or challenged by someone ought to be referenced to a reliable secondary source that supports that claim. We summarize what the reliable sources say about a topic instead of advancing our own personal understanding of the topic. Clearly, your own personal knowledge of the topic can inform and guide your search for the reliable sources, but verifiability is an essential Wikipedia policy, and citing reliable, independent secondary sources is the best way to ensure verifiability.  Cullen 328  Let's discuss it  17:43, 12 July 2012 (UTC)