User:Cullen328/sandbox/DeCosta

Your article still has lots of problems. I am truly not sure that this person is notable, but there are aspects of the article that will raise red flags for reviewers.


 * The local small business award does not belong in the lead. It is not a notable award, as such awards are given out in large numbers everywhere.


 * Describing Maxwell as "best selling" is inappropriate since the article is about DeCosta not Maxwell.


 * "End user product roadmap" is promotional jargon and all such fluff should be ruthlessly stripped from the draft. Write concisely and neutrally.


 * Capitalizing "Sales and Marketing" is inappropriate as is excessive italicization. Put all quotes in quotation marks and reference them. Comply with the Manual of Style.


 * The facts about Crespillo do not belong as this is an article about DeCosta not her.


 * Do not question the reader as you did in the DVD story. I don't really think that story belongs.


 * Phrases like "challenges one's mind" and "provocative insights" and "intriguing insights" are overtly promotional and should be removed without exception.


 * There is no need to mention the other authors in the book series, as that is not relevant to DeCosta, and comes off as name-dropping.


 * The facts about the early history of the Boston Latin School do not belong as they have nothing to do with DeCosta who was not yet born. Any interested reader can read Boston Latin School.


 * Links to external websites should be removed from the body of the article although wikilinks are fine.

I recommend that the draft article be rewritten in the dry, factual style of the WVU faculty profile.