User:Curtisag/sandbox

Week 1: Wikipedia Training
Completed all training listed as a part of the "Getting started on Wikipedia" module.

Article Evaluation
When looking at the Wikipedia page entitled Julia Pastrana, I noticed that reference #4 which appears as follows has two broken links:

"Archived copy". Archived from the original on 2015-05-31. Retrieved 2016-08-11.

I am unsure which source this reference corresponds with since there is no author or title listed for the source referenced. Another source listed as #3 is cited as coming from the organization BuzzFeed. Nowadays, BuzzFeed has shifted to become more of a news platform, but I am unsure of its reliability as a source for historical information. How does one determine the legitimacy of an organization where seemingly pertinent information is found? Under the heading "Life and career," the first few sentences reference historical excerpts and facts but have no citation or reference listed. Later on in this heading, there are citations listed, so I am unsure if this source was also used for the first part where no citations are referenced. Under the "Music" heading, there are no in-text citations listed verifying the existence of multiple songs based on Julia Pastrana.

The information included on this page is neutral overall, but almost seems to have a bias to using sources treating Julia Pastrana as a spectacle and specimen to examine. While acknowledgment of this part of Pastrana's life completes the narrative, I wonder if there are any firsthand accounts or comments recorded by Pastrana herself. Although, there may not be any such records due to her status as a slave/property. Perhaps there are recordings somewhere from her family and a section about her family could be added to the page. Currently, there is only a couple sentences regarding her son but no other information about her family or familal inheritance of her genetic conditions.

A sub-heading under the heading "Medical examinations" may be helpful to elaborate on the potential genetic conditions Julia Pastrana had influencing her unique appearance. Maybe some data on the frequency of these conditions would be helpful too since this page goes into depth about how she was viewed as being this never before seen anomaly.

I have also noted that this page has a relatively short talk page and is a part of WikiProject Mexico, WikiProject Biography, and WikiProject Women's History but is overall rated as C-class and of low importance.

Cindy:
In the article Cat anatomy, there is a huge lack of citations in the muscle sections of the article. Could this be due to the lack of scholarly articles?

Allie - I noticed that this article (Cat anatomy) is a bit inconsistent in organization. Some sections are divided into multiple sub-headings while others have many paragraphs with no sub-headings. The Digestive system heading is an example where I think improvements could be made to better integrate each heading of the page into a more cohesive, singular page. Cindy, you may be right in guessing there are few scholarly articles because I noticed an overall lack of citations in general for this heading when compared to the rest of the page. Curtisag (talk) 05:52, 26 February 2021 (UTC)

Anessa:
In the article Shark, some of the research papers referenced are 10-20 years old. Is there any more recent research on shark biology and different types of tissue?

Also, the organization of the photos/captions at the top of the article was distracting - it seems like it would be more logical to order the captions for the photos from left to right and top to bottom, since they're organized in rows. As is, it's distracting to have to try to figure out which name goes with which shark species.

Cindy - even if the information was initially found on a non-scholarly source, most places will link back to scientific articles or books. I feel like in the age of the Internet (and even more so now with COVID), people are more likely to skip over sources that aren't easily accessible (i.e. physical textbooks and journals). Not having any sources at all can make the article a dead end for people (especially students like us who have been told that the citations on Wikipedia and other websites can be a good starting place for research). Kanessa192 (talk) 23:11, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

Allie - When looking at the long list of citations for the Shark page, I also noticed that there were some older references which isn't necessarily concerning. However, I also noticed some areas where citation was still needed. I also wonder whether anyone has gone through some of the older references to check for outdated information. Maybe some citations got left on the list even though the information/data has since changed. Also, the section on brooding is very short, so I wonder if this section can be expanded upon using sources already used. Maybe adding a bit to the Heading entitled "Life History" about the general life cycle of sharks would be a good addition. Curtisag (talk) 05:15, 26 February 2021 (UTC)

Allie:
In the article I selected about Julia Pastrana who participated in various freak shows to make a living, there is little to no discussion of her self-claimed gender identity. Could this be a bias that doesn't take personal narrative into account?

Group Discussion: Plagiarism

 * Blog posts and press releases are not good sources of reliable references because of their inherent bias and ulterior motive behind creating the piece. Often, they are influenced by income/personal gain versus neutral facts.
 * A company's personal site is not a good main source because their main motive when creating the site is profit from consumers instead of a neutral history of their company. Their website also will not highlight any information or history about the company that would be bad for their overall image to consumers like scandals or poor business choices.
 * Copyright violation includes the direct copying of someone else's expressions, words, images, etcetera in your own work without the creator's permission while plagiarism, although it can include direct copying, focuses on the act of not citing another individual's source that you use when creating your own work.
 * To avoid close paraphrasing and plagiarism:
 * Take notes when reading a source in your sandbox rephrasing information from the source you're reading
 * Cite any information you could not have written without a source
 * Have a copy of your source properly cited in your sandbox with your notes on that source

Feedback: Discussion

 * Nice work here and great redirects to the specific page you made for Julia Pastrana.
 * See that page for more feedback.Osquaesitor (talk) 22:21, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Owl article
Working on the Owl article interests me because of both personal interest in these unique carnivorous birds and potential areas for improvement on the main page. The sub-heading entitled "Sexual dimorphism" is in need of some citations, and the "Anatomy" heading could potentially have a section about skeletal structures added. Some associated pages to edit could be Tytonidae and Barn Owl which overlap greatly and seem a bit inconsistent. The subheading entitled "Adaptations for hunting" and second subheading "Beak" also need citations. The fossil record is also scarce, and I wonder if any updated information could be added to extinct species found in the fossil record like in the associated article Ogygoptynx.

Disorders of sex development article
The article interests me to due to its broad depth and applicability to my Capstone project which I have been collecting primary literature for that could potentially be useful for updating this article. I noticed that the main page does not have much cultural or historical information regarding individuals with differences in sex development. I would be interested in working on the associated page XX male syndrome since I have been looking into the SRY gene for my Capstone project. There is also no mention of sex reversal through the Wnt pathway under the heading titled "Conditions". The associated page Intersex medical interventions could be edited with information about the International Classification of Disease and potential issues and federal implications of referring the intersex conditions as "disorders". Additionally, the subheading on "Genital anatomy" is quite brief and has associated pages without any sources included (see Primordial phallus).

Sex differences in psychology article
This article in particular also connects to areas of personal interest in my Capstone project and focuses on the psychology of the Homo sapiens species within the class Mammalia. Notably, the heading entitled "Possible causes" is in need of many citations, and the secondary subheading entitles "Epigenetics" could be updated since many more studies examining epigenetic influence on sexual differences in psychologically. The subheading "Culture" also is in need of expansion and more citations while the subheading "Development of gender identity" uses bias language and relies heavily on one patient case. Associated pages Sex differences in memory and Sex differences in intelligence. Another page that could be linked to this article is the page Mental disorders and gender which could be linked to the subheading "Mental health".

Suggested Additional Citations for Bird anatomy page
The section I will focus on editing is listed below with potential sources to add.

Vertebral column
The vertebral column is divided into five sections of vertebrae:


 * Cervical (11–25): (neck)
 * Trunk: (dorsal or thoracic) vertebrae usually fused in the notarium.
 * Synsacrum: (fused vertebrae of the back also fused to the hips/pelvis). This region is similar to the sacrum in mammals and is unique in the pigeon because it is a fusion of the sacral, lumbar, and caudal vertebra. It is attached to the pelvis and supports terrestrial locomotion of the pigeon's legs.
 * Caudal (5–10): This region is similar to the coccyx in mammals and helps control the movement of feathers during flight.
 * Pygostyle (tail): This region is made up of 4 to 7 fused vertebrae and is the point of feather attachment.

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The chest consists of the furcula (wishbone) and coracoid (collar bone), which, together with the scapula, form the pectoral girdle. The side of the chest is formed by the ribs, which meet at the sternum (mid-line of the chest).

Potential new sources include:


 * Storer, Robert W. (1982). "Fused Thoracic Vertebrae in Birds: Their Occurrence and Possible Significance." Journal of the Yamashina Institute for Ornithology. 14(2-3): 86-95. doi.org/10.3312/jyio1952.14.86.
 * Rashid, Dana J.; Chapman, Susan C.; Larsson, Hans C.E.; Organ, Chris L.; Bebin, Anne-Gaelle; Merzdorf, Christa S.; Bradley, Roger; Horner, John R. (29-07-2014). "From dinosaurs to birds: a tail of evolution." EvoDevo Journal. 5: 25. doi.org/10.1186/2041-9139-5-25.

Vertebral column
The vertebral column is divided into five sections of vertebrae: ~
 * Cervical (11–25): (neck)
 * Trunk: (dorsal or thoracic) vertebrae usually fused in the notarium.
 * Synsacrum: (fused vertebrae of the back also fused to the hips/pelvis). This region is similar to the sacrum in mammals and is unique in the pigeon because it is a fusion of the sacral, lumbar, and caudal vertebra. It is attached to the pelvis and supports terrestrial locomotion of the pigeon's legs.
 * Caudal (5–10): This region is similar to the coccyx in mammals and helps control the movement of feathers during flight.
 * Pygostyle (tail): This region is made up of 4 to 7 fused vertebrae and is the point of feather attachment.

The chest consists of the furcula (wishbone) and coracoid (collar bone) which, together with the scapula, form the pectoral girdle; the side of the chest is formed by the ribs, which meet at the sternum (mid-line of the chest).

Herpetologists
Overall, the work seems to be evenly distributed between you all. I'm not sure if Olunia is working on multiple articles or if those are for later, but the work seems equal when looking at just the Axolotl suggestions.

User:Abbieloring
Description

Do you plan on adding more intext citations to the paragraph? It might be nice to have more than one source and/or cite the same one for other info in the paragraph.

Distribution and Habitat

"Agalychnis callidryas also require high humidity levels of at least 80%."

Don't forget to italicize species names!

Behavior

I'm not really sure what the quotations are in this paragraph. Are you able to quoting as part of your edit? Is this quoted because it's a copyedit from the original page?

Diet

Are you adding information about Diet? I see the subheading is listed.

Reproduction

Did you add any outside sources not previously used? I didn't see any sources listed in your Outline section.

User:Brownkr
"Turtle anatomy includes both an internal and external skeleton. The external skeleton is comprised of a bony shell which serves as protection. The internal skeleton makes up structures such as the flippers and facilitates the anchoring of muscles." I edited some grammar including commas and weird capitalizations. It might be good to specify that Pleurodira and Cryptodires are suborders. The term "subgroups" might be confusing.

Head

"Their tongues are used to help swallow their food, however are not able to be outstretched." <This sentence structure is a bit odd.

Shell

"The shell inside differs from the outside. Inside the shell is composed of many bones including ribs and vertebras, whereas the outside is composed of scutes. Scutes are a keratinized part of the epidermis and are similar in structure to scales of other reptiles, and are made of keratin." <I don't think the first sentence here is necessary because the next two sentences are good. I also fixed some grammar.

Respiration

A photo showing all the organs connecting to the lungs would be helpful.

Skin and molting

"The rest of the body is covered in smaller scales, similar to other reptile's scales, which are made of keratin." <Aren't scutes also made of keratin?

Limbs

"Tortoises have two fewer phalanges on each of their feet, do not have webbed hind feet, have hind limbs made of elephantine, and have less wrist mobility than that of aquatic turtles." <Potential new sentence structure for better flow. You might want to format the second citation listed in your Outline section as a book instead of a website. Have you used the citation tools for the new sources you list? I'm having trouble telling, and I couldn't find the article "Turtle Mating Systems: Behavior, Sperm Storage, and Genetic Paternity" listed in the references.

User:Knowl8dge
Description

Does your elaboration on buccal pumping use the same source listed as 28 on your group sandbox citations?

Habitat and Ecology

Why did you want to add quotations around "the fresh water"? Are these lakes actually high in salinity?

Neoteny

It might make sense to include neoteny as a subheading under the section about model organism since neoteny is somewhat lab-bred. Do they have a good image in the original page for neoteny already? You could add one if they don't.

Other

I'm a bit confused by the other articles listed in your Outlines section. Are those other articles you are interested in editing later?

Mammologists
The group sandbox is fairly easy to navigate. I like how the main headings separate each individuals' plans because it makes the division of work easier to see. In regards to your guys' gameplan and outline, the work seems fairly well divided. I'd love to see more equal distribution of drafts for Week 6 like Taylorstokes21 mentioned.

User:Blfaubion
Editing the Perissodactyla page

Limbs and Skull and teeth

Maybe you'll have some luck finding sources on UBISCO or WorldCat looking up Perissodactyla. If you can't find any general info, maybe look up some specific odd-toed undulates.

Reproduction and development

I like that you added a definition for the jargon used because I definitely didn't know what "precocial" meant. I'm not sure the addition of "begin too" is necessary but go for it if it helps with the flow and writing style of the page better.

Lifespan

Is there supposed to be a link where it says "potentially this source"?

Other

I think you might have a typo when talking about potential horse anatomy images to add.

I see that there is an evolution section on the page for Perissodactyla, and I definitely think explaining the evolution anatomically would be a good addition to this section!

Sources

I'm not sure why some of the references listed are bolded; maybe this is just a way of you organizing them all. I'd love to see you incorporating these sources into in-text citations for some of your proposed edits. The sources look reliable overall. Good work!

User:McKenzieKay
Editing the Ungulate and Camelidae pages

Characteristics

I found the second edit easier to read and process. The sentence feels natural and like it adds to the section. I would also double check for typos!

I'd like to see in-text citations especially for that sentence you added.

Sources

Maybe cite the sources you found like the first one (Mammalogy Textbook) you listed to make your draft easier to read when you go back to it.

Other

Great start! I'd like to see a draft of more of the edits you suggested in Week 5 and potential spots where images could improve the page.

User:Nautas99
Editing the Deer page

Economic Significance

I like the expansion on medicinal and pest implications of deer.

I'm finding it a little difficult to see where the restructuring edits are that you made. Maybe you can put that part of the sandbox in two columns to line up your draft with the original? It might be easier to see these other edits this way.

Other

Do you plan on adding any images like maybe of the velvet antlers used in medicine?

Sources

I like how you already have the sources included in your library of in-text citations. Your sources look reliable and neutral. Good work!

Week 9: Response to Peer Reviews
✓Sources:


 * I plan to find a better, peer-reviewed source on the cervical vertebrae instead of the current one used.
 * The book Biology and Comparative Physiology of Birds: Volume I by A. J. Marshall looks promising. I could also elaborate on the variety of vertebrae in birds using this source such as how the cervical vertebrae alone can number anywhere between 8 and 25 depending on the species of bird.

✓Images:


 * It may be helpful to refer to images I added somewhere in the text it relates to itself.
 * I may edit one of the images I added to differentiate between the types of vertebrae easier.
 * For example, I could take the photo of the Avestruz alta skeleton and color code each section of the vertebral column in a different color and include a key in the figure caption.


 * I don't currently plan to remove the ilium, ischium, or pubis from the pelvic girdle image. I chose to leave these labels in to provide orientation since the diagram is of the entire pelvic girdle.

✓Content:


 * The crossed out content will be officially removed, and I will include a copy of the original section for reference in my next draft.
 * I will keep the bulleted list instead of sub-headings since I am afraid there is not enough content for each section of the vertebral column to warrant a sub-heading for each.
 * I may change the bullet point list to a numbered list to correlate with the 5 sections of the vertebral column.
 * I plan to change the parentheses if I do this because all the numbers could get confusing so close together.
 * Edit the bullet point list format to be consistent for each vertebrae section (i.e. the colon and parentheses in the same place).
 * I may edit the bullet points to all include functions of the vertebrae mentioned AND a short definition. Overall, I plan to make each point include similar info.
 * Expand upon the bullet point for the synsacrum about how this anatomical structure relates to its mammalian homologue. I also need to check if the synsacrum fusion is common across species and edit this idea back into the bullet point.

Week 11: Second Draft
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Vertebral column
The vertebral column is divided into five sections of vertebrae:

Cervical Vertebrae
The cervical vertebrae provide structural support to the neck and number between 8 to as many as 25 vertebrae in certain swan species (Cygninae) and other long-necked birds. All cervical vertebrae have ribs attached except the first cervical vertebra. This vertebra (C1) is called the atlas which articulates with the occipital condyles of the skull and lacks the foramen typical of most vertebrae.

Trunk/Dorsal/Thoracic Vertebrae
The thoracic vertebrae number between 5 to 10, and the first thoracic vertebra is distinguishable due to the fusion of its attached rib to the sternum while the ribs of cervical vertebrae are free. Anterior thoracic vertebrae are fused in many birds and articulate with the notarium of the pectoral girdle.

Synsacrum
The synsacrum consists of one thoracic, six lumbar, two sacral, and five sacro-caudal vertebrae fused into one ossified structure that then fuse with the ilium. When not in flight, this structure provides the main support for the rest of the body. Similar to the sacrum of mammals, the synsacrum lacks the distinct disc shape of cervical and thoracic vertebrae.

Caudal Vertebrae
The free vertebrae immediately following the fused sacro-caudal vertebrae of the synsacrum are known as the caudal vertebrae. Birds have between 5 to 8 free caudal vertebrae. The caudal vertebrae provide structure to the tails of vertebrates and are homologous to the coccyx found in mammals lacking tails.

Pygostyle
In birds, the last 5 to 6 caudal vertebrae are fused to form the pygostyle. Some sources note that up to 10 caudal vertebrae may make up this fused structure. This structure provides an attachment point for tail feathers that aid in control of flight.

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The chest consists of the furcula (wishbone) and coracoid (collar bone) which, together with the scapula, form the pectoral girdle; the side of the chest is formed by the ribs, which meet at the sternum (mid-line of the chest).

Caption for File:Diversity of Bird Vertebrae.png
Collage of bird anatomical illustrations with the different vertebral sections color-coded across various species. The species included are as follows:

Top Row (left to right)


 * Struthio camelus
 * Sagittarius serpentarius (formerly Gypogeranus serpentarius)

Bottom Row (left to right)


 * Megascops choliba decussatus (formerly known as Strix decussata)
 * Falco rusticolus islandus (formerly Falco islandus).

Week 13: Final Draft
[[File:Diversity of Bird Vertebrae.png|left|thumb|287x287px|Collage of bird anatomical illustrations with the different vertebral sections color-coded across various species. The species included are as follows:

Top Row (left to right) Struthio camelus and Sagittarius serpentarius (formerly Gypogeranus serpentarius)

Bottom Row (left to right) Megascops choliba decussatus (formerly known as Strix decussata) and Falco rusticolus islandus (formerly Falco islandus).

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Vertebral column
The vertebral column is divided into five sections of vertebrae:

Cervical Vertebrae
The cervical vertebrae provide structural support to the neck and number between 8 to as many as 25 vertebrae in certain swan species (Cygninae) and other long-necked birds. All cervical vertebrae have ribs attached except the first cervical vertebra. This vertebra (C1) is called the atlas which articulates with the occipital condyles of the skull and lacks the foramen typical of most vertebrae.

Trunk/Dorsal/Thoracic Vertebrae
The thoracic vertebrae number between 5 to 10, and the first thoracic vertebra is distinguishable due to the fusion of its attached rib to the sternum while the ribs of cervical vertebrae are free. Anterior thoracic vertebrae are fused in many birds and articulate with the notarium of the pectoral girdle.

Synsacrum
The synsacrum consists of one thoracic, six lumbar, two sacral, and five sacro-caudal vertebrae fused into one ossified structure that then fuse with the ilium. When not in flight, this structure provides the main support for the rest of the body. Similar to the sacrum of mammals, the synsacrum lacks the distinct disc shape of cervical and thoracic vertebrae.

Caudal Vertebrae
The free vertebrae immediately following the fused sacro-caudal vertebrae of the synsacrum are known as the caudal vertebrae. Birds have between 5 to 8 free caudal vertebrae. The caudal vertebrae provide structure to the tails of vertebrates and are homologous to the coccyx found in mammals lacking tails.

Pygostyle
In birds, the last 5 to 6 caudal vertebrae are fused to form the pygostyle. Some sources note that up to 10 caudal vertebrae may make up this fused structure. This structure provides an attachment point for tail feathers that aid in control of flight.

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The chest consists of the furcula (wishbone) and coracoid (collar bone) which, together with the scapula, form the pectoral girdle; the side of the chest is formed by the ribs, which meet at the sternum (mid-line of the chest).