User:Cwdascher15/Michael Martin Hammer/Jaguilar2 Peer Review

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General info
Cwdascher15
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cwdascher15/Michael Martin Hammer
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Michael Martin Hammer

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Your lead paragraph is well written and it's neutral.
 * The last sentence you added gave the lead paragraph the improvement it needed.
 * I went to look at the original article and you did a great job in rearranging the sections.
 * Removing the Personal life section was needed, I think that if it has little to no information it does not to be there and the information can be moved to another section.
 * There are few words misspelled. Section "Business Process Re-engineering" - struggleing should be struggling