User:Cwn24/Foreign interventions by Cuba/Aleksander Ramirez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cwn24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cwn24/Foreign_interventions_by_Cuba?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Foreign interventions by Cuba

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * no lead

Content:


 * yes its relevant, original was very lacking
 * perhaps some of the content in the last paragraph of the Guinea-bissau war of independence section could become its own section
 * good to separate actions of Cuba individual filmmakers from Cuban government even if there is a link
 * yes it is up to date
 * it addresses some equity gaps

Tone and balance:


 * generally neutral tone
 * no claims clearly appear biased
 * some word choice e.g. tremendous aid does skew a little positive but mostly no
 * contend does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of any position nor away from another

Overall peer review


 * could use more sources for section on GB war of independence
 * sources
 * no page number for Schmidt reading makes it hard to check source accuracy
 * ditto for Piero Gleijeses book, also no access to source
 * Laranjeiro, Catarina source checks out
 * NYT article reflects Portugal conviction but not Cuba claiming Peralta was only visiting collegues
 * Glaijeses article tracks
 * probably should back up Angolan paragraphs with at least one more source
 * sources pt.2
 * should probably have a more diverse range of sources/ authors
 * sources are relatively current, could maybe use some a few more sources that were published more recently
 * wiki specifically asks if there are opportunities to replace news articles with peer reviewed sources, and yes that likely applies


 * sources pt.3
 * as specified above, links to books don't really work/ no page numbers
 * Organization
 * content is concise, clear, easy to read
 * content does not have grammar/ spelling errors
 * content is well organized
 * content on Cuban filmmakers could be slightly expanded and become its own mini section


 * images and media
 * N/A
 * Overall
 * content did improve overall quality of article
 * strengths include depth and breadth of content added
 * content could be improved with more sources/ more diverse sources/ fixing a few links
 * overall very strong
 * also inclusion of lead to reflect additions made to the article