User:Cwn24/Foreign interventions by Cuba/CalWilNyc Peer Review

General info[edit]

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cwn24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cwn24/Foreign_interventions_by_Cuba?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Foreign interventions by Cuba

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]
Lead:


 * 1) No lead, but there's already one written in the orig. article:
 * 2) Provide a brief history of Cuba's political status during the period you are reviewing?
 * 3) What about their political system, domestic needs, etc. pushed them to intervene in Africa? I.e. what is the context
 * 4) I think you could write the lead relatively easily! Might be easiest to finish the article and then write the lead.

Content:


 * 1) Very relevant, good addition to what's already been developed
 * 2) It seems that all of your content is up-to-date and is well-placed in your article.
 * 3) I think you try to integrate more angolan/Bissau-Guinean sources in your article. I understand that these are hard to find but it'd be rewarding and interesting to hear about their perspectives during/after these interventions!
 * 4) I don't think you have to worry about equity gaps.

Tone/balance

- No issues here. I think your tone is fine and I could only find one example, "tremendous aid", where you might want to pick a synonym.

Everything is presented objectively so there r no issues.

Sources and References

- Your sources are really strong. I like that you have non-American authors, though you have cited "Gleijeses, Piero" alot. I totally get that there might not be much academic attention dedicated to this subject.

-I think you'll find a lot of useful sources here: https://scholar.google.com/scholar?hl=en&as_sdt=0,22&q=cuba+guinea-bissau or through the library. I did a quick search and found some cool/maybe useful sources!!

Links work, sources are accurate

Organization


 * 1) I like the organization of your content, but I think you could improve upon sentence structure. This is a first draft so I get it
 * 2) I think you could break down the Guinea-Bissau section into different subsections –– could make it more digestible.
 * 3) Nice job with this

No images or media

- Makes sense to add this last

Overall impressions


 * 1) THe article is definitely more complete thanks to your contributions! Good job. Quality improved
 * 2) I think you were able to synthesize the details of your secondary sources really well. I skimmed through your sources and I'm impressed with how you made dense scholarly writing super easy to read! Good job!
 * 3) I think you're super close to having a really strong, almost complete, article. Definitely:
 * 4) Add images, graphs, visuals, if you can find any (def take from the secondary sources you cite!!)
 * 5) Add Bissau-Guinean articles/memoirs/voices if you can find them (primary sources?)
 * 6) Build on your great sources by adding  more secondary sources??