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Maternal Bond Article
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Maternal_bond

Suggestions for Improvement
Upon reading the article, I noticed a few errors in the first paragraph. The second to last sentence is a run on sentence with a grammatical error that needs to be fixed. The word choices of the last sentence, particularly the first three words, could use a minor change to help the flow of the sentence. Under the subheading Pregnancy, the last sentence in the first paragraph doesn't flow very well. Rearranging the sentence could help fix this problem.

Editing the Article
Original text: Many new mothers do not always experience instant love toward their child they need to spend and care for the child as will as learning about he/she first. A maternal bonding is a gradually unfolding experience that can take hours, days, weeks, or even months to develop.

Edited text: New mothers do not always experience instant love toward their child. By spending time learning and caring about the child, the love and bond between the mother and her child may strengthen. Maternal bonding is a gradual unfolding experience that can take hours, days, weeks, or even months to develop.

Original text: Beginning around 18 to 25 weeks, the mother also can feel the fetus moving, which can enhance bonding, as can seeing her baby during an ultrasound scan.

Edited text: Around 18 to 25 weeks the mother begins to feel the fetus moving, which can enhance bonding, as can seeing her baby during an ultrasound scan.

Teenage Pregnancy Article
Here's a link to the article I would like to add additional sources to: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Teenage_pregnancy

Additional Sources
Source 1: http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=11654714&site=ehost-live&scope=site

Women exposed to abuse, domestic violence, and family strife in childhood are more likely to become pregnant as teenagers, and the risk of becoming pregnant as a teenager increases with the number of adverse childhood experiences.

Source 2: http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=34629842&site=ehost-live&scope=site

Multiple studies have indicated a strong link between early childhood sexual abuse and subsequent teenage pregnancy in industrialized countries. Up to 70% of women who gave birth in their teens were molested as young girls; by contrast, 25% of women who did not give birth as teens were molested.

Source 3: http://ppn.sagepub.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/content/14/3-4/125.full.pdf+html

Some politicians condemn pregnancy in unmarried teenagers as a drain on taxpayers, if the mothers and children receive welfare payments from the government.

Source 4: http://libezp.lib.lsu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=47508472&site=ehost-live&scope=site

Studies from South Africa have found that 11–20% of pregnancies in teenagers are a direct result of rape, while about 60% of teenage mothers had unwanted sexual experiences preceding their pregnancy. Before age 15, a majority of first-intercourse experiences among females are reported to be non-voluntary; the Guttmacher Institute found that 60% of girls who had sex before age 15 were coerced by males who on average were six years their senior.
 * Excellent sources, and very relevant to the article. Josef Horáček (talk) 01:00, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

Adding the Lead to an Article
I found a completely different article than the ones I posted previously.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Child%27s_Dream — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cwooli1 (talk • contribs) 21:10, 20 February 2015 (UTC)

Analysis of Article
Overall I think the Child's Dream article is well developed and balanced. The article introduces the information in an order that makes sense. The article starts by presenting the history and development of the organization followed by its mission and strategy, and then success stories and additional information. The article also contains several citations that appear to be reliable.
 * I notified the other student about changing their article. Go ahead and work on this. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:52, 25 February 2015 (UTC)

Drafting the Lead
Child's Dream is a charitable not-for-profit organization founded by Daniel Siegfriend and Marc Jenni in 2003. The foundation is dedicated to empowering marginalised children, youth and communities in the Mekong Sub-Region of Myanmar, Laos, Thailand, and Cambodia. The primary goal of Child's Dream is to enhance healthcare to reduce child mortality, construct educational facilities to provide basic education and higher education, and provide scholarship programs and employment opportunities to families and communities. By addressing health, basic education, and higher education, Child's Dream works to minimize poverty by providing socioeconomic opportunities to help improve the future of each person's life. In order to work in different countries, the organization has legal entities in Switzerland, Thailand, Cambodia, Laos, and Hong Kong.