User:Cworrell09/Lost in the Crowd/Priyanshuuprety Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Chris Worrell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Cworrell09/Lost_in_the_Crowd?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists
 * Lost in the Crowd

Evaluate the drafted changes
In terms of the Lead section, I did not see any edits there but that might just be because you're making edits to other parts of the article. Though I don't have too much background information on this documentary, it seems as though all of your current edits are relevant and stay on topic. I think that the edits you have made thus far have done a good job about staying neutral. It does not have a biased or a persuasive tone and it does a good job of being factual and informational. Your edits seem concise and clear so I don't think readers will have any trouble understanding or comprehending your edits.

I'm not sure if there is any more research out there about Sylvia's Place or if you think any other information would be relevant, but it might be worth it to include a few more details about it if fits with the direction you want to take with this article. It might be worthwhile to incorporate any additional research on Sylvia's Place and relate it back to why shelters like these are important to women/LGBTQ individuals that face issues with welfare and poverty. If there are any statistics out there, maybe you could include some data in relation to it like you did with The Neutral Zone. Are there any images or other forms of media that you think might be beneficial to add to this article/would they enhance the information you want to convey through your edits? Maybe that's something that you might want to think about if you think it makes sense for your article considering that your article is discussing a documentary. However, I don't think that's a necessity so it's totally fine if you don't see that being useful for you. I would just make sure that they have relevant captions and that they adhere to Wikipedia's copyright policies. Based on the edits that you have so far, I think you have done a good job of adding onto the article helping to become more complete. I'm sure you know this but I would just make sure that the two references you have listed in your edits are cited properly when you publish your changes for your article.