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Lamprey all group work was done on 77lemonpie sandboxCyahDade (talk) 09:08, 26 February 2021 (UTC)

= Individual WK 2 Assignment: = evaluating lifecycle section of the lamprey page. The section as a whole seems to contain mostly relevant information, it does seem like there is rather a decent amount of info based on their diet that does not seem relevant enough to have that much information. This section of the article is neutral and is just presenting facts without coming off as bias. There is quite a bit of acting in this section and the reference list for the page is rather extensive. The sources are cited correctly and lead to quality, reliable, neutral sources. the talk page provides some good incite to the page as a whole. There seems to be a lot of discussion and help edits or suggestions made on the page, as well as clarification questions. At the top of the page it is stated that the page is a level 4 vital page and says that Wikipedia looks at this page and have a corresponding featured page regarding it. The talk page also gives the lamprey page a B rating. CyahDade (talk) 09:08, 26 February 2021 (UTC)

Feedback: Discussion and Adding to an Article

 * This assignment was not completed. Please see your Goal Tracking DocumentOsquaesitor (talk) 17:28, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

= Week 4: Picking Project Pages = Choices for semester project:


 * Mammal - I am interested in mammals, in particular marine mammals and how their life underwater makes then different than mammals on land. Potential edits include adding to the reproduction system section or the aquatic subsection. Three subpages : Aquatic mammal, Marine mammal, Animal cognition
 * Hagfish - Interested in how they led to the evolution or evolved into other aquatic animals. Potential edits include fixing dead embedded links and checking sources/references. Three subpages: notochord, inshore hagfish, vertebrates
 * The one I want to work on the most is Whale - For as long as I can remember, I've always had a fascination with whales and aquatic mammals in general, I would be really excited to get more reliable information on the pages and learn more about them as I go. Potential edits include adding more citations/references and adding more information to the sections that seem to lack such as the communication sub-section. Three subpages: Whale vocalization, dorsal fin, Evolution of cetaceans CyahDade (talk) 15:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

= Week 5: Finding Sources (Group Work) = Group discussion and notes will be in User:Ashleypress0511/Mydrafts, our team work sandbox. We discussed potential edits that need to be made, as well as, added some helpful sources to be used in the future. CyahDade (talk) 18:25, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

= Week 6: Drafting for Article = The article I will be working on editing is Cat anatomy, specially adding information to the introduction in order to accurately summarize what is being discussed in the article as a whole. My plan is to look at the article and the existing sources and seeing what I can use that is already there, while also checking sources that are already referenced, as well as, finding an adding new sources when needed. Right now there is only one sentence in the intro section, "The anatomy of the domestic cat is similar to that of other members of the genus Felis.", this does not accurately summarize the article as a whole.

Plan of action:

 * Review each section of the article and try to summarize the most important parts, in general terms
 * Look at article's talk page to see if there are any suggestions for work on the introduction section
 * potentially add in information regarding the brief evolution of cat anatomy
 * Checked the already referenced sources that I want to use
 * Search for any new sources that need to be referenced
 * Link the citations

Ideas
Mouth - specialized for killing and eating of prey and vocalization for the purpose of communication (Find source)

Ear - directional hearing (look at/ check source 1 on page and directional hearing page)

Nose - use nose for communication through odors, 14x more sensitive than humans, tough nose. (check reference 3 & 4)

Legs - are digitigrades (Check linked wiki page and reference 5)

Claws - pro-tractable claws (define), 18 digits and claws (find source)

Temperature and heart rate - hyperthermic or hypothermia

Skin - loose skin, scruff and primordial pouches (sources?)

Skeleton - common mammal/cat skeleton with specialized skull (cats) and jaw (domestic cats) [check reference 19 & 20]

Muscles - I think this section is too specific and information dense to reference generally

Digestive system - many common features with humans, sectioned stomach, similar cecum to dogs (not coiled)

Genitalia - mammalian anatomy for female and male genitalia

Physiology - similar to that of carnivorous mammals (check reference 30) CyahDade (talk) 17:49, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

Also got evolutionary information from http://co4h.colostate.edu/statefair/WashingtonStateCatProjectUnit3.pdf (Source 2 on team page)


 * "The first domestication of cats appears to be 8,000 years ago"
 * "Overwhelming evidence points to ancient Egypt and the African wildcat (Felis sylvestris libyca) as being the origin of the domesticated cat."
 * "Cat-like animals first came into existence about 65 million years ago. The oldest fossils showed a similarity to modern cats. These date back to 20 million years ago."
 * "As animals evolved, cats developed into the most efficient hunter of all. Their keen sense of sight, hearing, and smell make it easier to locate their prey. Strong legs to pursue and/or spring on their prey along with sharp claws and teeth to kill and tear apart the prey make cats very formidable."

Intro Draft
The anatomy of the domestic cat is similar to that of other members of the genus Felis. The domesticated cat is said to first appear in ancient Egypt about 8,000 years ago. Although cats share many common anatomical features with humans, as well as many other mammals, they are natural predators, hunters, and they have many specialized attributes, such as their jaws, skulls, mouths, and digestive system (original page source19 & 20). Although they do share many characteristics with other carnivorous mammals, their protractible claws, digitigrades, directional hearing (original page source 1), and communication through odors, using their ultra sensitive noses (original page source 3 & 4), help them when it comes to finding food the ideal food in their habitat. Although there are numerous different species of cats, much of their anatomy can be amongst all of them.CyahDade (talk) 09:13, 26 March 2021 (UTC)

Week 8: Peer Review
For this week I am peer reviewing the Ornithologists page and the Cephlochordates page. I am putting my reviews here and on the sandbox talk pages.

Allie

 * the organization and structure of the section is very good.
 * the section is easy to follow
 * the crossed out section of the third bullet point is a little bit confusing, I wasn't sure if you were crossing it out from the original or not or if I was supposed to read it.
 * the references look good and so do the citations
 * Good Job!

Janet

 * the organization is clear and well thought out
 * "This led to the syrinx being developed despite possessing a larynx and a key feature that separates the bird from other vertebrate." This sentence is a little confusing as your first sentence stated that birds have both a larynx and a syrinx.
 * your link for syrinx leads to a page about greek mythology, not the link I think you meant to include
 * the layout of section is very well done
 * overall, the draft great, good job!!

Abby

 * the organization is methodical and clear
 * it was nice to see the before and after of your edits
 * the way that you shortened the paragraph in a way that still preserves the information is well done
 * the sentences tend to seem a little long, like run on, consider potentially adding some commas or separating sentences or using shorter words
 * overall, job well done!!

Noah

 * your organization is very clear
 * consider not starting your feeding section with a quote
 * your references look good
 * your work is well thought out, good job!

Katelyn
CyahDade (talk) 07:52, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
 * the section looks to be well organized
 * I am a bit confused as to what you were editing/adding to the page itself, are you editing Noah's work?
 * your edits are well thought out and done
 * consider asking more references
 * overall, good job!!

Week 9: Peer Review Changes
There were a couple of different suggestions from last weeks reviews that would help me a lot. I have decided to make a bullet point list to keep my thoughts in order.

CyahDade (talk) 17:01, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Add the in-text citations as links (figure out how to re-orgnaize the new sources with the old sources, check goals sheet for how to)
 * potentially add reference to the second sentence
 * find a new, more helpful image for the intro section
 * potentially help Ashley with finding images for her section
 * do some different re-wording (listed below)
 * revisit the last 2 sentences for better flow
 * review this sentences "... with humans and other mammals..."
 * review this sentences "Cats share many... such as their protractible... and communication through odors."
 * clarify “Although there are numerous different species of cats, much of their anatomy can be amongst all of them”

= Week 11: 2nd Draft = The anatomy of the domestic cat is similar to that of other members of the genus Felis. The domesticated cat is said to first appear in ancient Egypt about 8,000 years ago. Although cats share many common anatomical features with humans and many other mammals, they also have specific features that set them apart from the rest. As natural predators and hunters, they have many specialized attributes, such as their jaws, skulls, mouths, and digestive system. Many mutual characteristics can be seen amongst other carnivorous mammals, however, cat's unique combination of protractible claws, digitigrades, directional hearing, and communication through odors, using their ultra sensitive noses , differentiate themselves from the others. Although there are numerous different species of cats, much of their anatomy can be found amongst all of them. CyahDade (talk) 16:33, 30 April 2021 (UTC)

Week 13: Final Draft
The anatomy of the domestic cat is similar to that of other members of the genus Felis. The domesticated cat is said to first appear in ancient Egypt about 8,000 years ago. Although cats share many common anatomical features with humans and many other mammals, they also have specific features that set them apart from the rest. As natural predators and hunters, they have many specialized attributes, such as their jaws, skulls, mouths, and digestive system. Many mutual characteristics can be seen amongst other carnivorous mammals, however, cat's unique combination of protractible claws, claws which they extend when hunting and climbing, digitigrade, directional hearing , which allows cats to register which direction sounds are coming from , as well as, communication through odors, and using their ultra sensitive noses , differentiate themselves from the others. Although there are numerous different species of cats, much of their anatomy can be found amongst all of them. CyahDade (talk) 16:20, 11 May 2021 (UTC)

Final Draft
The anatomy of the domestic cat is similar to that of other members of the genus Felis. The domesticated cat is said to first appear in ancient Egypt about 8,000 years ago. Although cats share many common anatomical features with humans and many other mammals, they also have specific features that set them apart from the rest. As natural predators and hunters, they have many specialized attributes, such as their jaws, skulls, mouths, and digestive system. Many mutual characteristics can be seen amongst other carnivorous mammals, however, cat's unique combination of protractible claws, claws which they extend forward, rather than moving back or withdrawing, when hunting and climbing, digitigrade, directional hearing , which allows cats to register which direction sounds are coming from , as well as, communication through odors, and using their ultra sensitive noses , differentiate themselves from the others. Although there are numerous different species of cats, much of their anatomy can be found amongst all of them.