User:Cyn4 sfu/Spatsizi Plateau Wilderness Provincial Park/Anjalikaila Peer Review

General info
Ziggybears, Eli-2632, BCSFU, and Cyn4sfu
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Cyn4 sfu/Spatsizi Plateau Wilderness Provincial Park
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Spatsizi Plateau

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

lead:
 * reflects all the points that are discussed in the article
 * could use a better introductory sentence, one that doesn't end with a citations; something along the lines of "spatsizi provincial park is home to many important species, and the park has a long history with itself and with First Nations groups"
 * good brief description of the sections in the article

content:


 * adds more and expands more than the original article
 * all relevant to the reasons on why its a protected area
 * talks about the aspects of the park, the animals, and species, the First Nations contributions, and the history of the park
 * all in well developed paragraphs, that get their points across properly and well cited
 * the content is up to date in some aspects to give a nowadays viewpoint of what has been happening, and also has past articles to reflect on the history of the park

tone and balance:


 * all content is neutral, not taking one side more than another sides
 * keeps all the information about just the history and what happened on the land of the park, and not about either the people who used the land, or the First Nations
 * kept the First Nations section very neutral as well
 * the content doesn't try to get the readers to push one way or another way

sources and references:


 * all sources are either recent or not, but the past ones are all about the plans of the park, and from the parks website
 * great use of secondary sources
 * all sources from proper sites, like BC parks, universities, or the government

organization:


 * would switch "like" to "such as" or something along the lines of that, just to break up the "likes"
 * broken into proper sections that make sense in a flow of information
 * this sentence: "biogeoclimate zones and subzones of the protected area include five different types and they include: etc," i think could be changed to "there are five different types of biogeoclimate zones and subzones of the protected area, which include: etc," if that has the same meaning as before.
 * in that same section, maybe change "for spatsizi plateau wilderness park," to "with that, spatsizi..." as it makes it sound like you're connecting this idea to one from before
 * "in the protected area" to "with in this protected area"
 * "there are many large mammal predatory prey relations..." to "it includes many large mammal predatory prey relations..."
 * "it contains by preserving 27 plant species..." to it contains by preserving the 27 plant species..."
 * keep numbers in coordinated so either in this form "20" or this form "twenty", don't mix them up
 * "notable regions include..." to "a notable region to talk about is the spatsizi river..."
 * "the subregion features" to "its subregion features"
 * "the river flows downstream from the south of and into spatsizi..." south of what?
 * "what was unique about the creation..." to what is unique about the creation..."
 * same sentence: "what is unique about the creation of this park, was that at the time, there was a lack of mentioning harvesting and/or exploiting in its policy statement"
 * capitalize Stone Sheep and Mountain Goats or don't capitalize any of them
 * under history, first sentence "meaning the "red goat" since the mountain goats..." to "meaning "red goat" because of the mountain goats..."
 * "during the early 18th to late 19th century..." to "between the early 18th and late 19th century..."
 * "after the late 19th century, individuals like... " to "after the late 19th century, individuals such as..."
 * everything is broken down into proper sections, that reflect what is being talked about in each of those sections

images:


 * pictures could be added: overview of the park, maybe a map showing the location of spatsizi to the other parks/areas that are around it

overall impressions:


 * great use of bring First Nations groups into the article and talking about their impacts
 * everything flows every well, and makes sense in the order that its in
 * the use of words works with the sentences
 * good use of talking about the protected areas/landmarks in the park that are protected by the First Nations group
 * and about the other First Nations historical stuff that's being conserved