User:Cyn4 sfu/Spatsizi Plateau Wilderness Provincial Park/Jennyjieun Peer Review

The lead does a good job of giving a general overview of the article. Throughout the draft, the tone is neutral and uses credible sources. The amount of detail in the article (such as the establishment of the trading post) gives good context to understanding the park's history. The article gives information on aspects of geographical boundaries, ecology, history, cultural significance and use. The voice is neutral and does not weigh into a perspective but gives information instead. The essence of each paragraph gives new information and is grouped with other relevant topics.

Engagement

As a reader, the article does well in defining the area. The most important topics in the article (or the most in-depth) are the zones/subzones and the historical context of the park. By understanding the zones, it allows the reader to have a better idea of connecting species to the area. The section containing information on Gladys Lake Ecological Reserve is easy to understand and gives great context to the vegetation and climate. The First Nation - Cultural Heritage section is also notable, as it defines the different Indigenous landmarks and mentions the Tahltan First Nation community, as well as their specific use of the land.

Content 1

· Information about what species can be found in the protected area (plants, animals, other species)

· Identification of any species at risk in the protected area, and information about their population trends, if available

The article provides a list of different species within the area, defining the type of vegetation and animals that can be found in the park. It also defines an area (ie. The Gladys Lake Ecological Reserve) that has been designated to protect the wildlife habitat and preserve the landscape. The article mentions the number of species at risk, and has a clear subsection for the conservation efforts of the area.

·       Description of the issues/goals that led to the creation of the protected area

·       How the boundaries and size of the protected area were decided

The article touches on the history and license ownership before the Provincial Park was established, as well as the area boundaries. However, if the information is available, the reason for conservation measures can be elaborated as well as any management goals/issues of the present or past.

·       Information about First Nations whose traditional and ancestral territory/ies are included in the protected area

''·       Historical use of the now-protected area: what resources were harvested or extracted there (biological resources like fish, animals, plants, or timber; physical resources like rock or oil), how much, when, and by who? How did this affect the formation of the protected area?''

There is also information on the cultural significance this area has to the Indigenous community, and what purpose it was used for. Furthermore, the section of First Nation - Cultural Heritage defines the protected sites and mentions the Tahltan community. However, there is no mention throughout the article of the involvement of indigenous communities in the Park’s conception or its future. The article also includes the area use of settlers and mentions the historical context of the land’s use for trade.

Content 2

In terms of any content gaps, there could be more information provided for Indigenous involvement in present and future decisions for the park. Any management processes can be defined as well, such as goals and issues that are currently being targeted.

Clarity

The article gives a lot of content; however, it is a little difficult to understand and follow for a reader without ecological knowledge. The writing under Recreation and First Nation - Cultural Heritage is a good example as it is clear, concise, and easy to read.

When submitting the final draft, the article should be consistent. For example, the Gladys Lake Ecological Reserve has good formatting  (ex. use of brackets, capitalization and hyperlinks). Make this formatting consistent throughout the article, such as under Lead and Conservation.

Structure

The flow of the article can be improved by adjusting the structure and headings. The Protected Area System is heavy on names, and a little hard to follow due to the amount of condensed information. As the first paragraph following the lead, it is hard for the reader to know its relevance. I would suggest ordering the subheadings under Ecology as first Conservation, then Gladys Lake, and lastly the Protected Area System. I also think the First Nation - Cultural Heritage section should come before the one titled “History,” as there is the context that comes before settler use. Remember to delete the “article draft” and “article body” headings above Recreation.

Tone

The tone throughout the article is neutral and professional. However, there are some inconsistencies with the voice of the article, as it is obvious that there is more than one person behind it. This can be lessened with making the formatting more consistent.

Sources

The article uses multiple references throughout the article. The sources are credible and not biased on one perspective.

Voice

The article touches on the different people involved under History and First-Nations. However, under the section "History," I would rename the current one as a subsection and have the First Nations sections come first. The reason for this is that the section under history has no context for Indigenous communities, and gives the impression that its "history" only encompasses settler decisions with the land. I would either include the First Nations historical context first, or rename the section entirely.

Overall

Well done! There is lots of details and as a reader I feel that I gained good information from reading this article. I think the content of the article is good and if there is more information and time available, adding management and Indigenous involvement wouldn't hurt. As well as simplifying the language and restructuring the article to clarify and help the reader understand flow. Thanks for the great work!