User:D.perez.usu/Aida Hurtado/Dianelivingston Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)D.perez.usu


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:D.perez.usu/Aida_Hurtado?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Very informative, concise first statement. I do miss a description of the major sections you plan to include in the article–maybe you aren't sure of them just yet. I would like to hear a little more in the body about the topic, intersectionality, and how Hurtado feels about it.

Content

I only assume that Mexican-American women psychologists are underrepresented on Wikipedia so this makes it a great contribution.

Tone and Balance

The article feels a little less than neutral, perhaps a little triumphant. Words such as groundbreaking, distinguished, and honored feel nonneutral. Also, I would like to hear more about her positions on things rather than just that she is widely respected or served a major role in the field.

You add that she bridged the gap between psychology and social work. What does that mean? What did she do or say that bridged the gap?

This is a great start and I assume you are still working on sourcing. Please more sourcing–that will make her notable! She has written things and I love that you included her works. Is it possible to include a URL so we can quickly find them? The one link you included doesn't seem to link to anything–maybe I'm doing something wrong?

Organization

I think your information is easy to read and shows the topics she worked on. Just a few grammatical errors. Please add more sections so it will be easier to find what we are looking for. I imagine this is still a work in progress:)

Images

I look forward to seeing a picture of this wonderful woman!

Links

You might consider adding hyperlinks to other pages. That will help you to get more traffic on your page.

Overall impressions

This is a work in progress. Keep it up–add the sections, tone down the triumphal tone, keep the content, add sourcing, and fix your one link. She is a remarkable woman and it will be fun to see where this page ends up.

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