User:D3032447367/Canadian Mental Health Association/Stan1500 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Parouz
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Parouz/sandbox

Lead evaluation
The draft uploaded by the group did not include the updates for the lead. Along with the addition of new sections to the article, the lead will also need to be updated so that it can better summarize the new contents added to the article as well.

Content evaluation
I believe that the addition of contents in the draft will bring a huge improvement to the existing article. The group did a good job with some of the additional sections such as the Public Policy section and the condensed History Section. However, more information can be added to the other sections, especially the Programs section. Instead of just mentioning the programs briefly, it will be nice if the group touches on the details. The same goes for the Impacts section. More data can be utilized to show how the organization has brought positive impacts to the Canadian society.

Tone and balance evaluation
So far, the draft seems to be presented in a neutral point of view. The group did a good job in presenting the information without getting biased to a certain point of view. However, using CMHA website for the Criticism section may cause the article to be biased toward the organization's point of view. I would suggest the group to use other sources to cite for the section.

Sources and references evaluation
Most of the information in the draft were obtained from the CMHA website. It will be nice if the group can utilize information from other sources to make sure of the reliability and accuracy of the information presented.

Organization evaluation
By deleting a huge chunk of the history section and adding new sections to the article, the group did an excellent job in not just making the article more informative but also more organized and easier to read for the readers.

Overall evaluation
In the end, the draft can be further improved by adding more information to the Programs and Impacts section. Also, the draft should include a wider range of sources to ensure the relevance and accuracy of the information presented.