User:DGN5037/Christianity in the Ottoman Empire/AnthonyG5480 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

DGN5037


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:DGN5037/Christianity_in_the_Ottoman_Empire?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Christianity in the Ottoman Empire

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

For your drafted changes I'll be honest and tell you that they seem very good and well cited but I will still attempt to give some suggestions that you may want to consider in order to help you make them better. For your first sentence I assume it is meant to go in the opening segment and while I think it is an important pice of information I don't think it fits very well into that segment and would be better placed somewhere else, possibly in Religion as an Ottoman Institution but I'm not certain. For the second sentence the section it is going into is very slim on content and doesn't give a good overview on taxation and while your addition is a good step it would benefit from one to two more sentences, possibly talking about the collective tax or linking to the jizya wikipedia article. Third one is simple since you already have a link to Concubinage, but I suggest putting a very brief description of it, a small description of generally what it is may catch readers attention and get them to click on the article for further information on it. Finally for your last sentence I don't really have anything to say, I know that sounds like a copout. Overall I think your draft is really strong as a general suggestion the only thing I would also suggest for you to further enhance it would be to use another source if you want to add anything else as not having all the additions be from Sharkey would be helpful.