User:DVNewlin22/JD–MBA/JQGRAY Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

DVNewlin22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * JD-MBA
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * JD-MBA

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi D'Vaire,

This draft is looking great so far! I checked out some of your previous edits on the page as well, and can see that you've already put in substantial work on this article. I'm really impressed by what you've done so far -- you've written a great deal of new content on the page and have done an excellent job maintaining a consistent, neutral, encyclopedic tone throughout.

You've accomplished a ton by way of content, including an entire section on application requirements. As far as where to go with the project next, I wonder if it would be helpful to check out the Wikipedia pages for other types of degrees. I just did a quick scan of the Juris Doctor page and noted that it was pretty expansive. The Juris Doctor, of course, is a broader and more documented topic, so I imagine it would be challenging -- if even possible -- to equip the JD-MBA page with as much information, but I was thinking that could be a good approach if you get stumped and don't know what to do next. I've been doing that a lot with my own research -- I'm writing about zydeco music and have found myself frequently checking other more established genre entries on Wikipedia for inspiration on what to include, as well as to get a sense of what kinds of standards have been set by highly-rated pages, like what they include, what they omit, and whether there are specific linguistic or structural customs that have been set by the community of contributors doing similar work.

As far as constructive criticism goes, I can only think of small things. Your research and writing looks great. If the article were longer, I would focus this peer review on only your contributions, but since the article is still in its early phases, I'll point out some things I noticed that were there prior to your contributions. Maybe this is helpful, or maybe you've already noticed these things and were planning on fixing them. Anyway, here are some parts of the article that I think could be looked at again:


 * "Some schools, like Harvard, will need their applicants to apply AND get accepted to both their Law School and Business school".
 * I'd remove the capitalization on the word "and"
 * Other than that, this looks good, but I notice inconsistencies throughout the article on whether "law school" is capitalized or not. Sometimes it's written as Law school, other times it's written as law school. My gut tells me that lowercase is the right one, but I don't know what the standard is. Maybe a quick glance at some other Wikipedia articles could help to figure out what the custom is.


 * "Also, during a graduate student's first year of either Law or Business School, they can apply for the other school to start their Dual-degree program."
 * This seems to be missing a word and an apostrophe, so I put them above in bold.
 * Similar to my question about law school capitalization: does dual degree program get a capital or no? Again, I don't know the answer to this, but it looks like other articles on Wikipedia do not capitalize dual degree. Also noticed most leave out the dash.


 * At the start of the "application process" section (which is great by the way), I'd add some words for clarity.
 * Currently, it reads "The J.D application process requires:"
 * I would consider changing it to "The J.D. application process requires the applicant to provide:"


 * The application process section is comprised of two lists: requirements for the J.D General Application, and requirements for the M.B.A. General Application. These list titles are currently in standard paragraph formatting. I'd change these to a sub-heading format for easier readability.


 * In the "other application options" section:
 * Schools, such as University of Pennsylvania, have JD/MBA programs
 * The comma here feels a bit funny, but should easy to rework. I'm notoriously bad at using commas and avoid using them when I'm not sure, so I might wrong here, but I think you can just cut both of the commas from that sentence and it'll be good. So it'd be "Schools such as University of Pennsylvania have JD/MBA programs".
 * Honestly, easiest fix might just be to rework it altogether and consider whether giving the U-Penn example is helpful here for saying what you're saying. It's not bad, but it might be unnecessary.


 * Consistency
 * Already mentioned the Law school / law school capitalization inconsistencies
 * Also noticed that sometimes it says JD-MBA with a dash (in the title as well as throughout the article) and other times it says JD/MBA with a slash. I don't know which one is the right one, but worth looking into that and standardizing it throughout the article. Looks like other articles mentioning the JD-MBA use a dash.
 * In the "By country" category, there are subheadings for lists separated by program length (three-year, four-year, etc.)


 * Sandbox ideas
 * "Also, during a Grad students first year of either Law or Business School can apply for the other school to start their Dual-degree program."
 * I'd add apostrophe, add word, and remove some capitals: Also, during a graduate student's first year of either law or business school, they can apply for the other school to start their Dual-degree program.


 * The lists are impressive -- super extensive and well-referenced, though in their current format they're kind of tough to read. I wonder if sorting them vertically and in alphabetical order would make it more readable. Like this:

Brigham Young University

University of California, Berkeley

Elon University

Georgetown University

Harvard University

University of Houston

Liberty University

University of Missouri

New York University

Northeastern University

Pepperdine University

Santa Clara University

Stanford University

University of Utah

Villanova University

University of Virginia (ref)

Wake Forest University (ref)

College of William & Mary

University of Wyoming

Although my list looks long, it's all just ideas for small fixes, mainly to make the article more internally consistent.

You've done incredible research and your writing on this article is super impressive. I was psyched to see that you not only wrote so much, but actually created new sections in the article! This was a part of why I selected your article for peer review -- I wanted the chance to let you know I'm really impressed by the project you've taken on and I look forward to seeing where it goes from here.

Really great stuff, D'Vaire. Can't wait to see where you go next.

-JQG