User:D eunoia/User:Cvdunn/sandbox/D eunoia Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Cvdunn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Cvdunn/sandbox - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'll be peer reviewing the two sections, Apps & Services and Methods Institutions Use to Communicate. First, the content that you have added to Apps & Services is relevant. I do think that the part where you talk about how people are seeing the internet could have been added to the "Use" section as well. I like what you added and believe it is up to date, the inclusion of todays communication outlets, Twitter, Instagram and Snapchat and others a like was a good add. You should state where you received the information from at the last sentence. Who or what article specifically said that researchers are seeing that social media apps such as blogging and online gaming helps kids become creative? The content is very neutral and staying on topic, which is an improvement in my opinion. I would not say that the section is biased but it definitely goes by the good parts of social media incorporated in education more than the bad. I would say that you should go back and check for grammar errors and check to see if any sentences look "wordy." It is organized, your add ons connected with the other sentences.

Next, the content that you added to Methods Institutions Use to Communicate is also relevant. Your first sentences looks like the same one that is in your previous edited section, it is best to try to change it and to also state where the study is coming from. The third sentence is also redundant as people previously has made this known such as you did in the second sentence. I suggest deleting it or change it to where you can state the specific platforms like canvas or another classroom site. I feel the ending of your paragraph is good and relevant, the sources are up to date as well. What you said is considered neutral and I like that you gave some example of how social media is being used specifically how teachers are using it.