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Assign 3: Sustainability article >>> Sustainability


 * There were many instances where the words "many" and "some" were used to generalize an ideal that was being addressed, for example, "...in some developed countries with resource consumption levels far beyond what is likely sustainable..." which is important information to include, but not as specific as it could be to help build a greater understanding based of of what we already know or understand about of those countries. Like how America is more developed than parts of Asia and this helps us think about both American and Asian culture and how that factors into consumption.
 * There are 270 references and 8 sources in the bibliography which does show authenticity, but I feel as if there should be more in the bibliography just so that there can show that the author knows where the facts came from and who he got them from has their credentials.
 * There is some repetition when it comes to the structure of the article, for example, the table of contents is detailed, but many concepts could have been categorized under the categorizes already listed. This could help with transitioning to the next concept so that the information is flowing and make sense. Just like you cant know how to run without walking first, certain information needs to be introduced so that the reader can completing grasp the subject at hand. (personal opinion)