User:Dahlman, Steven A./Milo Academy Bridge/Liam Raviv Patterson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dahlman, Steven A.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dahlman,%20Steven%20A./Milo_Academy_Bridge?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Milo Academy Bridge

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Lead is strong! Gives general overview of the bridge, the location, and its significance to the Milo Adventist Academy. The "Milo Academy Bridge" header should be deleted to place the lead right at the top of the page, and the subject of the article ("Milo Academy Bridge") should be in bold to indicate it as the subject. Other than those formatting changes, however, this lead feels good!

Content Content seems pretty solid, but a little bit light. Again I see some formatting issues such as extra spaces and proper nouns where a Wikilink would be helpful, but generally the content of the article is good. I would personally add more information if you can - perhaps some context around the construction of the bridge, or the precise reasons for replacement bridge in 1962. Overall, a good start.

Organization

Very, very good organization. Simple, to the point, ordered well. Each topic flows to the next. No changes needed here.

Tone and Balance

The tone here feels mostly professional and to-the-point. This is mostly a positive, but there are areas where the tone doesn't quite land. For example the line "It is the only steel truss covered bridge in Oregon, with the covering only filling an aesthetic rather than structural purpose." feels a bit like a judgment call. It might be more helpful to write something like "The covering has no structural purpose." rather than using the word "aesthetic."

Sources

It does worry me that you only use 3 sources. They seem pretty good, but the fact that there's only three of them make me a bit uneasy. I'd recommend digging into the sources from your sources and try to find some more information through them.

Overall

This is a pretty good start! I think your main strength is the overall structure and ability to keep things concise and to-the-point. If you were to make improvements, I suggest just adding more information and making some formatting updates. Otherwise, your article feels good and you're on the right track!