User:DaisyAStephens/Back to back Theater/Musaka777 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Daisy Stephens


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sWASfpIKrrFklziMXPPVTTw7vjluMFSOoyUwDSRjFpQ/edit?usp=sharing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, a lot of work has been done on the article and I can see the effort and research put into it.

The lead contained new material and introduced the subject, It was a little too long and included history, which I think should be in the next section. Some phrasing issues that can be easily solved. The content was relevant and up to date, however there was a lot of repetition. This can be fixed by making it more concise and simple. Tone was informative, the balance wasn't ideal, since it didn't include any of the critics of the theater group, or just reviews that were opposite to the ones praising the company. There were no references or sources or citations.