User:Daisyfriedman8/The Sessions (film)/Chalynfaye Peer Review

The writer mainly created an additional heading for the content of the article: Themes - Disability and Sexuality. The writer was able to clearly write detailed instances from the film to explain how disability representation and sexuality within the disabled community are portrayed by the characters. What was helpful in this addition was relating the plot of the film to concepts written in published/-peer-reviewed articles before, such as mentioning the medical model. This explains how the draft also includes good and reliable sources to back up their additions to the article. The additions also clearly depicts the influence of sex and and finding sexual satisfaction for people with disabilities, even mentioning the environmental needs (specific settings) that people in this community would have to seek for when accommodating their sexual needs.

I think it would help to separate different points made in this addition to separate paragraphs. This can allow the writer to expand on these ideas and concepts more without being mixed in to the whole paragraph about Themes: Disability and Sexuality. This will lead to a more organized addition to the original article. A suggested organization would include a separate paragraph for the following concepts/ideas: disability drag, expressing sexuality, intersection between disability and religion, how disabled people seek or fulfill their needs (i.e. sex), the presence of romance for disabled people, and "visual language." However, some of these paragraphs can be combined if the concepts and ideas are deemed similar enough.

Overall, the article draft included specific and clear details in order to input a disability and sexuality representation present in the film, especially since the original article lacks this explanation.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Daisyfriedman8


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Daisyfriedman8/The_Sessions_%28film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Sessions (film)

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