User:Dalanlaughlin/Poverty in Kenya/Honeybee15 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Dalanlaughlin
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Dalanlaughlin/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The addition of gender inequality is relevant and fitting. The content added feels a bit rushed and could use a bit more flow in moving from one aspect of a women's life that is affect to the next.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The tone is neutral and informative. It addresses the multiple aspects of a women's life that is tied in with gender inequality and poverty.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
I see that you seem to be missing sources for your sources of 1 and 3. Your 2nd source is reliable and good!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
Your addition being in social inequality makes sense and fits. However, I can also see this topic expanding more. I suggest entertaining the idea of adding a whole new section on just "Gender Inequality and Poverty". I feel like this would give oyu more space and range to add more to the article.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I believe your contributions are good and fit will within the article! It's informative in addressing gender inequality and its tie to poverty in Kenya. Try seeing if adding a whole section on "Gender Inequality and Poverty" is something you may want to do instead!