User:Dalia SeifAllah/Self-efficacy/AdubofourGh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username): Dalia SeifAllah


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dalia%20SeifAllah/Self-efficacy?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Self-efficacy

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall Comment: I believe that, overall, the contribution is great. There are secondary research sources to back the claims made in the draft and the added information is good. The language is non-biased and easy to understand. Below, I provide detailed notes on other areas that may need reconsideration before the draft is finalized.

Lead: The lead as it currently is in-depth and is of a considerable length. However, it could be adjusted to indicate the specific applications of of the theory of self-efficacy in diverse fields such as health, education particularly in writing, etc. This will make it understandable to find a section in the content that talks about self-efficacy in writing. This way, future editors can also develop other sections in the article on the application of self-efficacy in other fields. Generally, I believe the lead of the article will keep improving as new addition to the content in the future are made to reflect in it.

Content: The content is relevant to the topic and up to date. One of the references is as young as 2019. In spite of that, future additions could increase the number of such recent secondary sources. Another point of consideration has to do with the draft is the second paragraph which talks about two forms of self-efficacy - self-referent and self-regulation. I am not sure whether I should call them sources or effects of self-efficacy. I believe the author could make that clear at the beginning of that paragraph, and if these are not the only ones, that should be indicated even if researches do not exist yet about them. It addresses equity because of how it deals with self-efficacy's application to writing. This is evident in the lead section as it currently exists since it seems to emphasize self-efficacy in the field of psychology.

Tone and Balance is maintained in the article and that deserves commending. Sources and references are also presented well though future edits could work at including more recent sources.

Organizational considerations such as punctuations (spellings of names of authors and the use of possessive forms) and conciseness should be worked on. For instance, in the first line of the first paragraph, "Standing at the core of Bandura’ social cognitive theory" could simply be "At the core of Bandura’ social cognitive theory." Also, "The effect of self-regulation in writing has been investigated as well in Hidi and Boscolo’s (2006) article" could be "Hidi and Boscolo (2006) have investigated the effect of self-regulation in writing."