User:Damianperea31/Okinawan Japanese/Ekarck Peer Review

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I don't speak Japanese so I'm not sure if this is relevant- but does Okinawa have a specific translation/meaning in English? You mention in the first paragraph what Yamato means or is it just the name of the islands?

I think it could be beneficial to link an existing wikipedia page (if it exists) to the word Ryukyuan in the middle of the first paragraph.

I think that the first few sentences of your lead are good, maybe there could be a separate paragraph explaining these languages ( Northern Ryukyuan Okinawan and Kunigami languages) in detail and how they relate to Okinawan Japanese.

In the history paragraph, the information on Ryukyuan and the Ryukyuan Islands is a little confusing on how it relates to the Okinawa Islands and language. I'm not sure if you want to keep all of the information about Ryukyuan or maybe write an additional transition sentence explaining the connection and why both are being discussed in the history section.

In the section of differences from standard Japanese, it might be useful to explain why some words have different meanings/uses.

I think the clarity in the lead and differences from standard Japanese paragraphs in some places is a little confusing. I had this problem too and I found that reading it out loud really helps when figuring out what sounds off and what could be made clearer.

I think you did a good job of linking other wikipedia articles within yours. I am going to go back to my article and use that strategy as well to give the reader an easy way to learn more about a topic without having to explain it in-depth in my article.