User:Dancer2025!!/Milonga (dance)/Pancho.Villa1701 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dancer2025


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dancer2025!!/Milonga_%28dance%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Milonga (dance)
 * Milonga (dance)

Jonah's edits to the page
Lead


 * The lead to the original article was altered to include the 8 count beat and the accent included on the sheet music.
 * The format of the lead was not changed that much, as the original lead (see Milonga (dance)) was complete. I will note that there are a few instances of Wikipedia indicating that an additonal citation/footnote is needed, and that has not been added quite yet.


 * I would reccomend moving the additon to the lead to a seperate subsection all together, perhaps titled "musical style" or something like that, just to seperate it from the historical backgroud provided in the original article.

Content


 * The entirety of the "racial and sexual past" section seems to be written by Dancer2025 and added in for this project. While the user does a good job of remaining unbiased and fair while desrcing the racially and classist motive to the dance's popularity and spread, there is little to no writng on the sexual aspect of the dance. I would reccomend renaming the subheading "racial and classist past" instead, as it is more fitting.
 * I cannot say that the content is up to date. There is no mention of the dance in the 21st century, and barely any mention of the dance after 1900 at all. It would be cool to see the progression of the dance in the last hundred years, although it seems like there might not be much information on it out there. Perhaps there is a YouTube video or something of it being preformed in the last ten years.
 * The article does talk about underrepresented populations, namely the Afro-Latino population in Argentina. While that is covered fairly well, has the dance remained popular among all Argentines?

Tone and Balance


 * The article deals with racial appropriation and the use of blackface, but remains neutral in the commentary. Whie in traditonal college papers Dancer2025 would be asked to take a side, Wikipedia does not encourage that writng style. Dancer2025 does a solid job of remaining unbiased and approches the topic with a fact-based attitude.

Sources and refrences


 * There are two sources listed, but both of those listed were pulled from the original article.
 * I find it odd that under the "racial and sexual past" subsection only two sources are cited despite the deep-dive of information presented. It would be prudent to add 5+ sources that would refer a reader to a different source

Organization


 * The article is organized well for the most part
 * As referenced earlier, I would reccomend filing the additions made in the lead under a new subheading that explains the style--not the historical background that the lead is meant to be. I would also recommend renaming the "racial and sexual past" heading to focus on race and class more than anything else. It would be cool if some sexual elements were brought in, but if those are unavilable maybe focus just on class more. Regarding class, it seems like there are some good points made in the second paragragh in the "racial and sexual past" subsection
 * If possible, adding a bit about the exportation of the dance to America or Europe would be cool, in a sentence or two to wrap up the article