User:Dancer4949/Reynaldo Rivera/Intellectual pixie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dancer4949


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dancer4949/Reynaldo_Rivera?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I liked the way your article gives details about the artist family/early life!

For the lead i suggest making it more concise. Maybe even just using the fist sentence "Reynaldo Rivera (1964–present) is a photographer known for capturing historic queer, trans, predominantly LatinX scenes, such as clubs and house parties, in late 20th century Los Angeles." as the lead and use the rest of the information in the body. Also make sure the lead does not contain any information not contained in the body. For example the Silverlake Lounge is noted in the lead but not the body.

For the article body I suggest putting a reference at the end of each sentence so that it is a little more clear which reference the information is stemming from. Also as I previously noted maybe move some of the information that's in the lead into the body. Also try to avoid words such as "haphazardly" because of Wikipedia's neutrality rules.

For the references I feel like everything looks good!