User:Danel216/Fast fashion/Emmareside Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Danel216's work.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Danel216/Fast_fashion


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fast Fashion

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is potential for more information yet it Is off to a great start. The draft looks like an introduction/lead section. It is well related to the topic and is not obscure useless information. The information is neutral, up to date, and does not regard one of wikipedias equity gaps. It is backed up by a secondary source but that source is a blog and I could not find if it was peer reviewed or not. The writing is formal and is well done. It would blend well with the level of writing within Wikipedia articles There is not much to evaluate but it is on its way to being a good quality addition to a Wikipedia article. It is written clearly and is understanding. There are no spelling or grammar errors. The information added improves the article by making it more rounded. The strength of the content added shows the severity of fast fashion and its potential issues. I wonder if the additional information added may be bias towards a more negative view on fast fashion rather than neutral due to their bibliography. They may need to just review their sources and go on OMNI to get reliable peer reviewed sources that are neutral in view.

A next step that can be taken is to find out more information and to research the companies involved in fast fashion to provide examples as well as more overall sources. It is going in the right direction and is in the early stages, therefore, there is not much feedback that can be given. I can see that this article can be successful if they continue in the path they are going with the slight correction of their bias. - Good job!!