User:Danel216/Fast fashion/Izzyadams Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Danel216


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 * User:Danel216/Fast fashion


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fast fashion

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I really like the section that you are adding to the article. I think it adds a good perspective on the negatives about fast fashion. The article did look at labour concerns but I like that you are discussing more issues. It is a good start but i think you could go more in depth in certain situation and negatives effect that fast fashion is creating. Perhaps you could add more about the specific impacts the fast fashion industry is having on the planet. Often when clothes are return from being purchased online they end up being thrown away, an image that you could even add would be like a mass pile of clothing just in a landfill. I think the first sentence leads the reader in well, but you could follow with those irreversible impacts that are occurring. I defiantly think that this content is relevant to the article and gives another side to the situation. For the sources is you could include the links that would be good, just so people can click on them and read more scholarly articles on the effects of fast fashion. I think it would create a better standpoint because you would be laying out the facts with stuff to back it up instead of right now it seems more opinion based. If you are going to add more you could create sub sections of the issues it is creating, example environment, people's state of mind, the advertising industry. Overall I think it is a good topic and good start but you can really get more specific and give concrete examples of the issues that are happening.