User:DanielCC1999/Ainu language/Pufferfish12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Porkey & Toothy (although, for some reason, the title of this peer review page has user DanielCC1999 listed)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Ainu_language&oldid=1113484658


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ainu language

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article seems to already be quite decently developed from other editors. There is a good amount of example sentences and charts. The main edits made by Porkey & Toothy were in the Oral Literature section and Speakers section.

The content that was added is neutral and not repetitive. The article is also organized well.

Suggestions for future edits: A possible area to work on is the lead section - it has not been updated yet to reflect the information in the Oral Literature section. The first few sentences in the Oral Literature section are also not cited. If there are any research articles about the history of the Ainu language, that might be good to look into, since the Lead section mentions that it is a contact language. Additionally, the new content includes a good summary of the history of oral literature research - the key figures and dates. One way to expand this section is to add the results of the research mentioned.

One comment about editing: I noticed that the article was edited directly, without first being drafted in a sandbox. For an article as developed as this, it might be easier to make a sandbox for it and copy sections from the original article, so the editing can be more focused within the sandbox. That way, there is a "safe space" to draft new information. There was also another editor who advised adding edit summaries for future edits, so that other editors can review them more easily.

Overall, good work on finding new content to add. Keep it up!