User:DanielCC1999/Konjo language (Bantu)/Xeimonanthos Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

DanielCC1999


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:DanielCC1999/Konjo_language_%28Bantu%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Konjo language (Bantu)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi DanielCC1999. I think your additions were great. However, I think a few things could be improved. Please consider my points below:

Clarity: There isn't really any information about the section of Phonetics as a whole, as you immediately went to the subsections. I think your article would benefit from a broad descriptions of phonetics in the Konjo language prior to details about consonants and vowels specifically. For instance, you could talk about the rough prevalence of vowels compared to consonants, or you could generally say "Konjo phonetics are marked by alveolar and labial consonants, as well as _ vowels". This would enable readers to better understand the information that follows. Even in the subsections, I think more information could be added to make reading the article easier. It doesn't have to be anything complicated, it could be something as simple as "The table below shows _", as it is important to consider that not everyone on Wikipedia is well-versed in linguistics. Some people will be looking for information and will not be able to make sense of it if further details are not provided.

Content: The table for the consonants is well-designed and the tone throughout the draft is neutral. Looking at the article itself, though, I think many improvements could be made with fairly accessible information. For instance, it is already stated in which countries the language is spoken, so creating a map with a caption for illustrative purposes would be beneficial. The article in general would benefit from more pictures. Similarly, the Writing System section does not mention a lot of basic information, such as the word order. Obviously, citing sources is important and I realize that it is a limitation to what you can add, but I think lots of other information could be easily added, such as about the use of prefixes/suffixes, about the language's history, and about its status as a language. You could even add a section with fun facts, if you are able to find the right sources.

Overall, I think you did well. The sources are appropriate and the information is there, it would just take a little bit of editing and research to make the article better. Good luck and I hope this helps!