User:Danielhur01/Alexander Mosaic/Njacobs9 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Danielhur01


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Danielhur01/Alexander Mosaic


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Alexander Mosaic

Evaluate the drafted changes
The writing style is objective and appropriate, and all of the information seems accurate and useful. I think some of the grounding and background information in the "Production" and "Alexander and Darius" sections could be better arranged to follow a more linear progression of information, rather than a seemingly random combination of information, though that very well may be just the nature of this initial sandbox draft. Ideas could better be separated by sentence instead of being combined into long sentences, such as the first sentence in the "Production" section. This also applies to the second section, and the specific information about what is depicted in the mosaic could be separated from general historical background information, as well as the grounding information. The last section "Alexander Exedra..." is good in how gives background as to what the scholarly debate is around how the house is constructed, rather than just presenting one theory as fact. You could potentially add other scholars' opinions about how it was constructed to balance out Hoffmann's perspective, unless there aren't any other theories that are significant enough. References seem good, except 3 and 4 seem to be missing some info. Njacobs9 (talk) 06:12, 29 November 2022 (UTC)