User:Danielle Bellamy/Herpesviral encephalitis/JacobWhite28 Peer Review

General info
Danielle Bellamy
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Danielle Bellamy/Herpesviral encephalitis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Herpes simplex encephalitis

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the lead I think you should expand more on what Herpesviral encephalitis is, as a clear definition is not given, instead I think your lead sentence should be in its own section such as epidemiology or something of that nature since the information is good and it is helpful to know which type effects which populations. For the signs and symptoms section, I recommend citing a source for the initial symptoms of the disease since you give a list of symptoms but it feels like it was just pulled out of the blue. The sources you currently have are good as they are all scholarly in nature, I recommend adding more information for how the disease is spread and the types of transmission as the article gives the scientific modes of transmission but it does not specify the specific act in which is spreads from human to human. If possible, it would also be nice to add a section talking about the cultural modes of the disease and the history of what it was thought to be in antiquity. Your sentences are structured well, however they do not really seem to have much organization and so creating a more thorough outline of what you want to add might be helpful as it might add more structure to what you want to add. If possible, it might also be good to add a graphic of the issue and where the virus is most endemic to. Overall you have a good start and it is clear that you are able to effectively utilize sources to back your information, just need to add more things at this point.