User:Danielletjm2001/Sexual anorexia/Agrewal246 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Danielletjm2001


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User: Danielletjm2001/Sexual_Anorexia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sexual anorexia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Dani! Here's my peer review for your article.

Lead

 * I see you did not add anything to the Lead section, but I believe that the section can be improved by acknowledging the sections of sexual addiction and social phobia being related to sexual anorexia that are later discussed in the article.
 * The last sentence of the lead section also discusses how anorexia nervosa and sexual anorexia share four main characteristics which could be interesting to expand upon in a new section with academic research that you may find.

Content

 * In the history of the term, you may be can expand on how the term has evolved within the writings of each person. It would also be a chance to highlight different cultural perspectives especially by mentioning how sexual anorexia was different in Julia Hare's book for Black women.
 * To add to the history of sexual anorexia, it may also be beneficial to see if further research has been conducted beyond the 1998 experiment by Patrick Carnes. Otherwise, the data is rather outdated, but it is understandable since the topic has limited research. It would be interesting to find out if sexual anorexia has been mentioned in the academic field beyond 2008.

Sources and References

 * Most of the sources that you included are academic sources, but they lack open access. It may be beneficial to update the source links to link to open access to the journal article. It also might be useful to replace the Healthline source with a peer-reviewed journal article.
 * You also could replace the unreliable source that is mentioned in the lead section. Otherwise, the article is definitely supported by reliable secondary sources.
 * It might also be interesting to search for more diverse authors alongside Julia Hare, and how sexual anorexia may exist in other cultures.

Organization

 * Great job in editing the structure and grammar of the Causes section, and moving the last section to a more relevant section.

Overall impressions

 * The contribution you produced I think has helped the article by improving the organization. However, I feel you can definitely help improve the sources, content of the article, and update the article to reflect more recent developments and research (if possible).
 * Good luck!