User:Danielmogil/Deafness in Soviet Russia/Lucyniyaz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Danielmogil Deafness in Soviet Russia


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Danielmogil/Deafness_in_Soviet_Russia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Lead is completely new, there was no existing article prior to peer's edits. There is a very clear intro sentence and paragraph to the rest of the article, however please specify what VOG is earlier or link to it. There is a paragraph explaining the rest of the article (Background). Lead is concise.

Content:

- Content is relevant to topic, Deafness in Soviet Russia

- Content added is up to date

- Content needs clearer timeline of occurring events, i.e. possibly creating subheads for years and including data in that way.

- Addresses historically underrepresented group, i.e. the Deaf community in Soviet Russia

- Content is neutral

- Content is backed by peer reviewed journals, i.e. Jstor. Reliable sources, very relevant to topic. Well done on incorporating history with the tsars article as well.

- Links work

- Content needs to be worked into paragraphs, but well done finding all of the information so far. "Deaf Space" doesn't make sense as a headline completely, I wonder what your headlines look like if you broke them into "Deafness in Theater" "Deafness in Soviet Space Travel", and etc.

- No images

New Articles

- Notable!

- Just organize things a little clearer, but you're doing a great job!