User:Danielpalen345

Hello Daniel,

I reverted your rewrite of the Chewonki Foundation page: http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Chewonki_Foundation&diff=268858935&oldid=261233961

The text you wrote has several problems:
 * 1) It is written from the perspective of the Foundation (e.g. "our name," "we are known").
 * 2) It's loaded with subjective claims like "Chewonki has become synonymous with innovation" with no evidence to back them up.
 * 3) The section "Our Mission" is a copyright violation-- it is text taken straight from the organization's web page.

If you want to improve the page, try adding facts to the text that is already there. You might also review the Wikipedia policy on the "neutral point of view": http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Neutral_point_of_view

Pingswept (talk) 04:36, 14 June 2009 (UTC)