User:Daphne DSB/Oarfish/Rpsenka Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jblythe.bc22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Daphne%20DSB/Oarfish?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Oarfish

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I think that there are good changes that have been added to the article's sandbox with the particular article that is being edited and that the information presented will bolster the wikipedia page. The way that this sandbox with  edits from Jblythe.bc22 is currently set up shows the lead sentence (which is accurately summing up why the information is important). The content in the article body is relevant to the picked topic and the information it presents is helpful. Something I would say to improve the article body is to make the sentences transition a little more smoothly by combining some. As of right now, some are a bit abrupt. I would also add another citation to the article after the sentence "Hyperossified pterygiophores have been discovered to run along the entire dorsal length of oarfish" to denote that that article is where this information came from.