User:Darr320/User:Darr320/Linguistic Injustice: Education/KoreanChristianAmerican Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Darr320


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Darr320/Linguistic Injustice: Education
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The first sentence of the lead is concise and relevant. The second part is not mentioned anywhere else in the body, wish you touched upon the body a little bit more.
 * 2) The content is fine, but may benefit with the inclusion of paragraph breaks, pictures, or subheadings. (It is long.)
 * 3) As for tone, it was scholarly in parts. However, I think for
 * 4) "Howard notes in his article that many urban schools use standardized testing and monitoring systems that position minority students disproportionately in lower-level classes and vocational education programs, thus perpetuating racial and socioeconomic inequalities.  Overall, this highlights the imperative need to develop policies and practices that address systemic inequities in education and provide all students with the necessary resources for success. Specifically, policies are required to ensure that all students, regardless of race, ethnicity, or socioeconomic status, have access to experienced and licensed teachers, advanced curriculum, and early education programs. Nelson et al. argue that schools should adopt a culturally responsive strategy by incorporating indigenous languages and cultures into the curriculum and encouraging the development of students' cultural identities. By adopting a culturally responsive approach to education, schools can ensure that all students receive the necessary support and resources to achieve academic success and realize their maximum potential."
 * 5) This feels like a persuasive essay. (The last line feels like an argument.) In addition, some words like "imperative" and "required" seem a little too strong for the context of the article.