User:Davidbbell3/sandbox/PeerReviewObliqueFault

Peer Review of the above Draft - Dated March 4th, 2021[edit]
This draft is appears to be a complete editing of the original article on ‘Silver mining”

Most noticeably is that the article content has been divided under fewer but larger sections and that Lead section is almost as large as the article itself.

LEAD SECTIONS:[edit]
The first 2 paragraphs appear unchanged. These paragraphs adequately preface the sub-sections that make up the body of the article:  they denote the elements and mineral ores where silver is usually found with and these associations necessitates 2 particular extraction methods. In addition to timespan and geography of silver mining.

But 3 new paragraphs have been added to this Lead section. Under the criteria of the lead section as being the most important points of article and to serve as a brief, clean description that will later be expanded on in the article sub-heading, the third, fourth and fifth paragraphs don’t belong in the Lead Section.

NEW LEAD SECTIONS:[edit]
The third and 4th paragraphs are well written but would be better suited to be under a sub-heading like “Silver Ores”. The entire paragraph is well described under this heading with the exception of the sentence:  “Floatation separation is a key step in this complicated process”. This sentence would be more suitably found under the existing heading of “Ore Processes”.

The 5th paragraph is a good fit for a new heading such as “Silver Uses and Market”. Given the main article topic is “Silver mining”, the content of this paragraph should not be in the Lead section. It should be moved into its own sub-section. In addition, the sentence in the 2nd paragraph:  “ ''. . . silver is a precious metal . . . .often been lucrative''”, is an adequate preface in the Lead section for this paragraph so no change is required to the lead section if this is a sub-section.

REMOVAL OF THE HISTORY SECTION:[edit]
The removal of the History section creates a void. The reader may falsely assume that silver mining is a current-day phenomena. How would the reader know that current ore processing technique are improvements if they don’t know how it began. The design of this new draft can work interimately if there is to be a later intending to move this historically mining section to another Wiki webpage and just link it.

ORE PROCESSING SECTION:[edit]
A very well written, clean and easy to read section. There is no need to give detailed description for the smelting process; mercury amalgamation; the patio process or pan amalgamation as you have wisely already linked these to appropriate Wiki webpages. You may want to also link  “Chemical leaching”; as many reader may not be familiar with it.

PRODUCTION AREAS:[edit]
As these tables and content appear to be the same as the original article, this section was not included is Peer review of this draft article.

REFERENCES:[edit]
Only 7 of original citation were maintained and 7 new citations were added. The added citation are reliable sources in that they are well-known and used. However none of these new citations are hyperlink available. There are some sentences lacking citations but this is still a draft.

OVERALL:[edit]
All sections re-written were very well done:  simple and clean. There was no bias nor POV issues. The grammar and the spelling were flawless. The Lead section would do better if restored back to the first 2 paragraphs only and the other 3 later Lead sections moved to their own headings. There is a void left by removed the history section that is solved by later editing exercises. Overall a strong draft worthy of publication!

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