User:Dcirum/Mombasa Marine National Park and Reserve/Kuroko19148 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dcirum


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dcirum/Mombasa_Marine_National_Park_and_Reserve?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mombasa Marine National Park and Reserve

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Has the lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

I have not seen any additional information added to the lead section that reflected your changes. Was the information in the lead section sufficient enough or should you add a sentence to give an overview of the history?

Is the content added neutral?

The information that was added was very informative. No sort of persuasion was hinted.

'''Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Are the sources current?'''

I have reviewed your references and the links work and are pretty up-to-date. Good Job!

Is the content well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Reading through the article itself and your edits, is there a way to identify where the introduction begins and ends, as well as the body section? (indicated that the introduction consists of the paragraph about the park being a tourist area and popular beach) Right now, it seems the introduction and body section are combined. I have saw that you added a 'History' section to separate out content that is not suppose to be in the introduction.

How can the content added be improved?

Overall, I enjoyed reading your contributions to Wikipedia and you did great! One thing I would say is that since you added a 'history' section, maybe you can write a few sentences about the current state of the national park.