User:Ddzhangiryan/sandbox

DACA (Deferred Action for Childhood Arrivals)

 * The links all work properly.
 * It is updated and addreses the rescinding of the policy by the Trump administration.
 * It says "Research shows..." but doesn't cite where this research is coming from. Maybe it's in the end, but it's not clear.
 * Some statements have been labeled as "failed verification," meaning that the editor failed to verify their statement.
 * There doesn't seem to be any bias towards the subject.
 * Some people on the Talk page are arguing about the rescinding of DACA.
 * Someone on the Talk page addresses a sentence as superfluous and unnecessary towards the subject.
 * Some sections are missing information. For instance, the state responses section is "missing information about the... differences between the states that support DACA and those that oppose it."

Article Draft
I'm working on this article with Frank Yang and Logan Rinder.

These are our potential articles:

1) Milo Yiannopoulos 2) Gentrification of San Francisco
 * Add that the school spent $800,000 for security during his brief speech at UC Berkeley.
 * In addition to monetary costs, his appearance on campus caused a disruption and a series of protests occurred in response.
 * Add information on the lack of organization involving Free Speech Week between UC Berkeley and Milo's team, which ultimately led to its calculation.
 * In regards to immigration, there is no information regarding Milo's planned attempt to publicly name undocumented students at his UC Berkeley event.
 * Add in the tech world/ Silicon Valley's impact on gentrification in San Francisco.
 * For instance, the article on low income families facing eviction because the building is being rebranded for Facebook workers.
 * The article also lacks to mention the freeway battle that occurred between residents and the wealthier community of San Francisco in the late 1950s/early 60s.
 * Add a section that addresses immigrants impact on gentrification, specifically information regarding the impact of Asian and Latino immigration on gentrification

Peer Review (Sofia Rivas)

Your suggestions for these articles would definitely make them stronger and more informative. Make sure you cite your sources properly for costs to the school and impacts of gentrification. I do not think news articles such as the one you linked to on theguardian.com are reliable sources in the eyes of Wikipedia. It would also be hard to incorporate stories of families having to relocate on a Wikipedia article without sounding bias. I do think it can be done through statistics and analysis.

Finalized Article Topic
Executive Order 13769 (Protecting the Nation from Foreign Terrorist Entry into the United States)

In this article, under the "Reactions" section, the only events mentioned are protests in the airports. However, there are huge amount of people who are reacting to this issue on social media platforms. The wikipedia article doesn't mention this portion of the public reactions at all.

Relavant Information on Public's reaction towards the Executive Order:


 * Celebrities are 'horrified' by Trump's 'un-American' immigration ban
 * http://www.businessinsider.com/celebrities-donald-trump-immigration-ban-2017-1/#seth-rogen-1


 * Trump’s executive order spurs Facebook and Twitter checks at the border
 * https://www.theverge.com/2017/1/30/14438280/trump-border-agents-search-social-media-instagram
 * Social Media Reactions: Hashtags
 * http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/2017/01/30/internet-reacted-donald-trumps-controversial-travel-ban/

Draft of Article Topic
Executive Order 13769 (Protecting the Nation from Foreign Terrorist Entry into the United States):

Trump's Executive Order 13769 caused an international outcry. Google trends indicates a significant spike in searches between January 29th 2017 and February 4th 2017 which correlates to the reaction that occurred. Responses on social media were seen immediately, hashtags such as #BanTrumpFromUK, #Muslimban, #travelban were seen all over social media platforms, such as Twitter. Shortly after, protests quickly emerged urging for the cancellation of Trump's UK visit. Such petitions garnered upwards to 1.5 million signatures. Social media was also utilized as a tool to provide the details of the protests around the world in order to increase attention and attendance. Celebrities, including Seth Rogan, Bruce Springsteen and Ashton Kutcher, were also very active on the ban, using their powerful presence on platforms to bring attention to and to speak out against Executive Order 13769. Some took it to twitter and voiced their opinions, while others projected their thoughts during their acceptance speeches at the SAG awards.

What's missing:
 * Social media reaction on the Executive Order 13769:
 * Popular hashtags
 * #MuslimBan: On June 12, after the occurrence of the 2016 Orlando nightclub shooting, Trump used Twitter to renew his call for a Muslim immigration ban. On June 13 Trump proposed to suspend immigration from "areas of the world" with a history of terrorism, a change from his previous proposal to suspend Muslim immigration to the U.S. The hashtag became popular on Twitter and opposition to the Executive Order widely spread among all social media platforms.
 * #TravelBan: Social media hashtag to the same instance after Trump announced the immigration ban on Twitter.
 * #GrandParentsNotTerroists : Under the new policy, citizens from six more countries, Libya, Syria, Iran, Somalia, Yemen and Sudan would be banned from entering the U.S. if they cannot prove they have a “bona fide relationship” with families in America. However, the "bona fide relationship" does not include grandparents, aunts, uncles or any other "distant relatives." To express the opposition to the executive order and to protest, the social media hashtag #GrandParentsNotTerrorists was launched by the National Iranian American Council (NIAC).The hashtag encourages people from the six banned countries to use Twitter and post photos of their grandparents to protest the policy.
 * 1) Celebrities' reactions on social media and which celebrities participated
 * 2) ** Seth Rogen: Seth Rogen himself is an immigrant from Russia. He explicitly expressed his opposition towards the Executive Order. And he used #MuslimBan in his Twitter Post
 * 3) ** Mindy Kaling: Mindy is the descendant of Indian Hindu, and she expressed her compassion for those who are banned to enter America.
 * 4) ** Bruce Springsteen, Ashton Kutcher, Taraji P. Henson, Dev Patel, Sarah Paulson, Julia Louis-Dreyfus also expressed their plea to embrace those immigrants via different mediums.
 * 1) ** Bruce Springsteen, Ashton Kutcher, Taraji P. Henson, Dev Patel, Sarah Paulson, Julia Louis-Dreyfus also expressed their plea to embrace those immigrants via different mediums.


 * President Trump's reaction on Twitter
 * Trump has also defended his executive order through Twitter. On January 29, he tweeted: "Our country needs strong borders and extreme vetting, NOW. Look what is happening all over Europe and, indeed, the world - a horrible mess!" On Monday, he continued to tweet, where he "de-emphasized the number of travelers affected by the hasty implementation of the travel ban", according to Business Insider. It was also written in The Washington Post that his tweets were intended to minimize the impact the executive order had on travelers. In several other tweets on Monday, he blamed travel delays on a Delta airline computer outage, "protesters and the tears of Senator Schumer". The computer outage Trump referred to actually occurred on Sunday January 29, two days after the order was signed. Trump defended the executive order on Twitter, stating that searching for terrorists is not about being "nice" and that "[i]f the ban were announced with a one week notice, the 'bad' would rush into our country during that week. A lot of bad 'dudes' out there!" On February 1, Trump tweeted, "Everybody is arguing whether or not it is a BAN. Call it what you want, it is about keeping bad people (with bad intentions) out of country!" On February 4, in response to James Robart's block of the Executive Order, Trump tweeted "What is our country coming to when a judge can halt a Homeland Security travel ban and anyone, even with bad intentions, can come into U.S.?" and later "Because the ban was lifted by a judge, many very bad and dangerous people may be pouring into our country. A terrible decision".

Social Media Presence - (REVISING ARTICLE)
Trump's Executive Order 13769 has caused widespread reactions around the world, and the topic has trended on the internet. Responses on social media were seen immediately through hashtags such as #BanTrumpFromUK, #Muslimban, #Travelban. Shortly after, protests quickly emerged urging for the cancellation of Trump's UK visit, garnering up to 1.5 million signatures. Social media was also utilized as a tool to provide the details of the protests around the world in order to increase attention and attendance.

Trump has also defended his executive order through Twitter. On January 29, he tweeted that the nation needs closer checks on incoming travelers, in order to keep the U.S. border safe. On Monday, he continued to tweet, where he "de-emphasized the number of travelers affected by the hasty implementation of the travel ban", according to Business Insider. It was also written in The Washington Post that his tweets were intended to minimize the impact the executive order had on travelers. In several other tweets on Monday, he commented that the travel delay happening in airports were due to a Delta airline computer outage, which occurred on Sunday January 29, two days after the order was signed. Trump defended the executive order on Twitter, stating that the travel ban was not announced in advance as to keep the United States safe from potential threats

In the meantime, many celebrities also expressed their opinions on the Executive Order. Seth Rogen, an immigrant from Russia, expressed his opposition towards the Executive Order using #MuslimBan in his post. Mindy Kaling, a descendant of Indian Hindu, expressed her compassion for those who were banned from entering the United States.

Social Media Presence (revised 11/23)
Following Trump's announcement of the order, the topic began to trend on social media. Hashtags such as #MuslimBan, #TravelBan and #BanTrumpFromUK emerged. Shortly after, protests arose urging for the cancellation of Trump's UK visit, garnering up to 1.5 million signatures.

On January 30, Trump tweeted "Only 109 people out of 325,000 were detained and held for questioning. Big problems at airports were caused by Delta computer outage..." He continued on in another tweet, "protesters and the tears of Senator Chuck Schumer. Secretary John F. Kelly said that all is going well with very few problems. MAKE AMERICA SAFE AGAIN!"

Celebrities, including Seth Rogen, Mindy Kaling, Jennifer Lawrence and many others expressed their opinions on the order.

Peer Edit (9/19)
You guys are absolutely correct that more could be added to that section about reactions to the Travel Ban. You've included a ton of information in this, so make sure that moving forward you're able to come up with a final product that is succinct and to the point. It's pretty interesting to me that the past writers of that Wiki page haven't included celebrity reactions because that was obviously a huge deal. If you're interested, the following link has tons of tweets from celebrities criticizing the ban:

http://time.com/4653873/donald-trump-immigration-ban/

Peer Edit (Raffi Terteryan)
My group is doing a similar topic; I'm surprised there is very limited information out there on social media protests. Some really good points of the draft were the plethora of references and the section on Trump's reaction was written with a very good neutral tone, just stating facts. The points were also very well structured. I'm unsure if the paragraph starting with "Trump's executive order caused an international outcry..." is part of your edit because it isn't referenced. If it is, make sure you find some adequate references. Also, it might be useful to use google trends data to show that there was heightened activity online or search for some studies done on the matter. Keep up the good work!

Peer Edit: Sara Park
I'm really intrigued by your topic! Can't wait to see how this article comes together!

Some general feedback:

-Good structure and organization! It would be helpful to have celebrities' tweets ordered chronologically, in the order they were posted.

-It would be cool to see data & numbers analyzing how the ban "caused a national outcry."

-For dates in the last paragraph, include years so they can be referenced in the future too.

Copy edits:

- This sentence in the first paragraph needs a semicolon instead of a comma between "Responses on social media were seen immediately" and "hashtags such as #BanTrumpFromUK, #Muslimban, #travelban were seen all over social media platforms, such as Twitter."

-Also in the first paragraph, this sentence: "Celebrities, including Seth Rogan, Bruce Springsteen and Ashton Kutcher, were also very active on the ban, using their powerful presence on platforms to bring attention to and to speak out against Executive Order 13769."
 * 1) "were also very active on the ban" is vague.
 * 2) "...using their powerful presence on platforms" is also subjective.
 * 3) The part that says "were also very active on the ban" has unclear wording. Maybe change this part out for something like "spoke outwardly against the ban,"...etc.

Peer Edit: Zeeshan Rauf
Nice job! I'm surprised that previous Wikipedia editors didn't include some of your content, but I'm glad you're going to be incorporating it. I would like to see some dates (even if they're rough) for "#TravelBan" and "#GrandParentsNotTerroists." I think it would be consistent with your structure. Also, I think the celebrities section is useful but that you could clarify with sources and clearer language. For example you could add specifically what Seth Rogan and Mindy Kaling said. I also think you should just add what Mindy said instead of saying she "expressed her compassion," to keep it more neutral. You could also add some of the mediums that the celebrities used, that you mentioned in the last bullet point. Lastly, your Trump on twitter section was very informative and strong, and I think you could improve it by adding the date to "On Monday."

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