User:Deantylermorris/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Ellen Ochoa

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I had never heard of her, and it seemed at first glance to be a solid wikipedia article. I'm curious to see if I can find any errors or outdated info in such a nice-looking article.

Evaluate the article
Lead Section: The intro sentence is perfect. You get a sense of her career, and abilities and accomplishments right away. There isn't a description of sections, but the sections are clearly defined. No unnecessary information in intro. Concise and informative.

Content: Content appears up-to-date as none of the reference links are older than 2013, and all come from reputable publications and news sources. All content follows a good, logical path through Ochoa's life and career. No information seems jammed in there for no good reason. There is one line I thought was worded weird though, and seemed a bit out of place. The last line in the second paragraph in the 'research' section seems stuck in there without much context, and the link is confusing. Should I mention that in the talk page?

Tone and Balance: The tone is very factual, and merely describes a life. There doesn't seem to be any sort of political agenda at play. There is much attention paid to Ochoa's achievements as a Hispanic woman, so you could say the entire article is devoted to representation and equity.

Sources and references: All sources seem up to date and reputable. Except for the link I mentioned above which goes to a source that is unclear.

Organization and writing quality: Organization is good. There is a logical flow from Ochoa's early life and up-bringing, to her career, to personal life today. There is one section called "National Service' that is sparse, and seems a bit redundant. Perhaps that information could be folded into another section about her career? Writing is otherwise good, with proper grammar and punctuation.

Images and media: There isn't much media, just a few official shots of her. I like when I can see images of people at various stages of their career. What they looked like when they were young, how their style changed, etc. This article doesn't really have any of that. Also, it would be great to get a shot of her in space, or actually working on something, instead of just official portraits.

Talk page discussion: The talk page discussion was very interesting, and even a little testy. There was a fairly heated back and forth about the definition of hispanic, and the timeline of citizenship, which did eventually result in the correct information populating the article. But it took 3 years for the conversation to be resolved. One contributor was especially rude, and that sent me down a rabbit-hole of rude edits and interactions with other editors. It was very informative to look at the talk page to see how things are resolved, and the process by which editors edit.

Overall impressions: Solid Article, but more media would be nice. Also, I would maybe expand or contract the National Service section. It's weird when there's a section that is only one sentence.