User:Declancohan/Jamie Siminoff/BrookeCostigan Peer Review

General info
Arive060, Declancohan, Lavin001, Matt Forrence
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Declancohan/Jamie_Siminoff?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Does not exist yet.:

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Fix up grammatical errors

Fix the lay out of the information, add titles so its easy to navigate

Citations are between each paragraph and not listed at the bottom.