User:Decross6/David Chariandy/Fegraham Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Decross6 group)


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 * User:Decross6/David Chariandy
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The lead opening paragraph to introduce the book Brother was well done. I believe that it gives a good insight on what to expect while reading it and overall explains the main details of the book. The first two paragraphs could introduce what to expect in themes and and places as it is a huge proportion of the book, hence when they only do a quick overview later in the article. I believe that the lead paragraph is very concise and to the point, explains the book very well.

The content of the page is very relevant to the book but I believe there is a lot more to be touched upon and explored into detail than just outlining it. Explain in detail why each place is significant or important to the characters of the book and why each place is constantly reoccurring. Giving a paragraph to each character really helps to explain any difficulties that a reader may have, as I always thought it is helpful to know what character is important in regards to understanding the story better. The themes could be more fully developed but I do like the themes that the group came up with.

I believe overall, the tone is very neutral in the tone and writing in the article. The article is well organized just needs to be more developed and more concise to clear important parts. The grammar particular when talking about the places of the book, needs to change the 'they and their'. The sources that were attached to the article does work. The sources are relevant to the article and brings the article more together. The overall structure is very good and the placement of the content is well organized with flow.